Support author at: https://www.dlsite.com/maniax/work/=/product_id/RJ01010144.html
Got the raw from: https://e-hentai.org/g/2424857/419865d769/

lots of grammatical errors.

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Why is there a nakadashi tag when we got full condom action all the time?

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We don't need a dedicated page for updates on your FGO progress.

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Editing comments:

1. Missing punctuation everywhere.
2. Most times, your font is way too big.
3. Your leading is too big most of the time too.
4. Your fonts are honestly pretty bad.

Typesetting guide: https://web.archive.org/web/20150408105241/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?3308-Typesetting-introduction

Also, dude, get a proofreader. Or at least open a grammar book.

p.4 which gave rise to a problem chronically > chronically?
p.4 properly let himself out > not the expression you're looking for
p.5 it's just things been
p.5 intervally
p.6 you may will
p.6 any of your need > needs
p.6 this is the time for the any of your need you talked about, please > yeah, this makes no sense
p.7 standing within the battlefield > on
p.7 the relieve
p.8 at giving handjob > handjobs

and more

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You know it's kind of funny how almost every Nightingale doujin basically has the same plot of "Master we need to have sex for medical reasons.", like sometimes there's some variation in Nightingale's motivations for it but ultimately still the same premise.

And I'm not complaining there's a formula for this character and it just works.

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I'll fix this, guys, I was going to work on this anyway.

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Never thought Id say this of a Nightingale book, but it was better until the costume came on

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On page 6, you've got partially hidden text from page 5

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