hello again, this time i did a short rio one, i'm not really confident at my redrawing so in the end i fill all of the transparent bubbles at the two last pages with white hope poeple don't really mind

as always, point out any mistranslation, typo, missing punctuation, etc or have any kind of advice, feel free to comment, thank you very much!

pg 9: You say all that, but your penis is keep getting bigger.

Change 'is keep' to 'keeps'

pg 12: Looks like you let it out a lot, huh?

Remove 'it'

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updated, thank you @kaisis, @deadeder

Last edited on 14 November 2023, 10:24.

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pg 4 "this is violation ...to my privacy" -> "this is violation ...of my privacy"

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Sex with Rio

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Nice oppai (✦ ‿ ✦)

Nice angle of those boobs on page 11.

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oh ，good

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