Hello, This is my very first traduction.

It's a handmade one, I originally translated it for myself, then uploaded it because there wasn't any english one so I thought why not.

It's obviously low quality given it's my first one, I've got no experience at all.

English is not my first language aswell, so please excuse me if there's poor sentencing or spelling mistakes.

Please note that it's actually a translation of a translation. I don't speak japanese but mandarin, so I translated it directly from chinese.

Anyway I hope that, despite the poor quality, it could make some people happy to get an english translation.

This was good. Thanks for the translation!

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did you just fucking left align all of the text????

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Ignoring the somewhat rough phrasing and grammar, there's multiple instances of the wrong words being used. On page 21 the girl claims she's waiting for the guy to get his "revanche" which is not only the wrong word but also not a word in English. The word you're looking for is "revenge", you used French there instead of English.

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Not bad for your first translation. A bit more polish and I can see some great progress in the future.

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Thank you for your advices! ><

My first language is indeed french, I'll try not to mix up words again!

I felt like something was wrong, and i realized that it's the left align, thanks you for pointing it out!

As I said I've got no experience at all, and definitely no suffisance aswell, it was just something i did for myself then uploaded out of the blue.

I'm working on the second volume taking all your advices into account, and putting more effort into the redrawing. I'll upload it too if I feel like it came up great.

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Alright, but before rushing on to your next work, you can try and take the advice everyone gave you and try to fix this one you just did. Almost no newbie translators do that, they all claim that they'd "do better next time" but can't even bother fixing their current work.
You can update your own galleries as well.

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Bro, did you just sell your daughter for 30k yen? He didn't even bother saying jack after MC lost the fight I guess he gives no fucks about her!

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Dang it, I've been waiting for part 3 for so long.

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Lmao marry strongest man yeah yeah. He just fuck her not marry her so wtf wrong with her? Lol in that case why she dont fuck MC after he become dojo ace? Author just put asshole to this story who just win fight and fuck her right away so where logic that author write before? Marry strongest man bullshit if she just fuck him without even date him just straight to onahole route. So boy just waste his time like wtf he supos to do after win his fight marry her? Hell no bitch 100% gonna be prego already and what boy gonna say like its dosent matter who father is as typicall cuz but what about all this bullshit marry strongest man? If she just fuck some random guy who know how to fight and use grappling skill as MMA fighter against karate master its just wow stupid as fuck. And why nobody stop him if its against sparing rules? This geezer just watch how random defeat his top 1 student with dirty trick cuz karate master never teach boy how to fight against MMA fighter so wtf boy not weak its just not experience enough to fight MMA fighter so geezer just let her daughter go with asshole who just use her as onahole? Wtf. This geezer should kneel down to boy and beg him to forgive him for his stupid ass and beg him marry his slut daughter but boy should say NO and leave dojo after win fight.

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Hello again!

I've re-done the translation taking all your advices into account!

I feel like it came up much better! I hope that you will enjoy the new version aswell !

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@hiroki-kun
it's not that serious bro

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Formerly Feed and Sucked

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@Louptoi

If you want to deepen your knowledge to be a good translator, you can follow these tips here:

General: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/ https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/ http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials
Exporting/Leveling: https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/902314557077336064/997654450149789757/optimize_image.jpg

I'm not a translator, these tips were suggested by cutegyaru-senpai, who is a great translator. Check out this work of his: https://e-hentai.org/g/2735664/d918a30fd2/

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@Coledas Ukgent

Thank you very much! I was searching for a guide for beginners, I'll look into it.

As I said I originally did this for myself, but I had a lot of fun translating it and it's useful to me, for keeping a somewhat good level in Chinese now that I don't have lessons anymore! I was glad to see that it made some people happy to get a translation of this work, so I think I'll post part 2 aswell after going through this guide.

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I guess the dad only cares about her daughter being impregnated as long as it is by a strong guy? Dude clearly wont marry her and according to his history he will jump on another woman that catches his eye when he gets bored.

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