Thank you for more Suna/Sandworks! Always appreciated.

You forgot to clean the bubbles on page 15 (mei3_016) though, just as a heads up.

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Fixed! Thanks @raemew!!

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I've had a script finished for this for a while. Just never had the chance to put it on paper.

I'm not gonna point out everything, just wanna give a few examples. Suna's writing is actually pretty hard to grasp when he writes gyarus, so it's understandable. Mei talks like a complete retard at times.

If you want, I can give you my script to compare to.

Page 2
Your TL: Heey, I'm peeing standing up!
JP: 見て見て～ほら立ちションのポーズ♥これであってるー？アハッ♥
Intent: Actually, she's saying it LOOKS like she's peeing standing up. She's not actually doing it (hence her surprise when he actually tells her to next line.)

Page 3
Your TL: Let me see your soaking crotch as you blow me!
JP: 両手を頭の後ろに組んでワキ見せろ愛依ーいいぞー股もガッシリ開けーフェラで蒸れた股さらせー
Intent: It's kinda minor, but here's what he's actually saying: "Show me how wet your pussy's gotten from sucking my cock." There's a causal relation here that you missed (フェラで)

Page 4
Your TL: I'm a pervert gyaru slut who loooves fucking men.
JP: 枕ヨユーのドスケベギャルってカンジー？アハッ♥
Intent: You're omitting 枕. She's technically saying she "sleeps her way up". This is a recurring theme in this Mei series.

Last edited on 28 December 2023, 10:04.

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