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[Bareisho Tarou] Aisha, Bell-kun ni Kaeriuchi ni Au | Aisha Defeated By Bell (Dungeon ni Deai o Motomeru no wa Machigatteiru Darou ka) [English]

[馬鈴薯太郎] アイシャ、ベル君に返り討ちに合う (ダンジョンに出会いを求めるのは間違っているだろうか)

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Jube  PM
Posted:2023-12-30 16:40
Parent:2762316
Visible:Yes
Language:English  TR
File Size:9.95 MiB
Length:11 pages
Favorited:667 times
Rating:
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Average: 4.17

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Posted on 30 December 2023, 16:40 by:   Jube    PM
Uploader Comment
The sequel to the Haruhime one, mostly the dialogue was a lot simpler with this one, but there was a few more context specific stuff I had to try make work. Either way, I love this one too, can you ask for a better sequel than Bell knocking up Aisha and Haruhime together? (Well, perhaps Mikoto...)

Hope you enjoyed this one too, always nice to see more Aisha work, isn't it?

The title is a bit clunky, it's something along the lines of "Aisha's failed revenge on Bell", with the term specifically referring to an avenger defeated by the person they aimed to take revenge on- pretty self explanatory given what happens. I couldn't think of a reasonable way to put that into English, so I went with the more obvious title about her being defeated by him.

Previous w/ Haruhime: hhttps://e-hentai.org/g/2782186/11e69bf6ba
Sequel w/ Nazaa: https://e-hentai.org/g/2782204/1d592cd7e2/

Artist: https://www.pixiv.net/en/users/18578807
Original: https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/112723309

UPDATE: After swallowing my pride a little, and accepting some fair criticism, I've updated this with a better font and improved some of the wording.
Posted on 09 December 2023, 20:02 by:   Jube    PM
Score +34
Also: I'm deciding if I wanna do the Nazhaa sequel to this, or that Ryu/Bell doujin. So, if you've got a preference let it be known.
Posted on 09 December 2023, 21:52 by:   cutegyaru    PM
Score +64
Not gonna comment on the TL, but your overall editing could be polished.

1. Your text is often waaaay too big and even straddles the bubble lines when there's no reason to.
2. Your leading (space between lines) is also often too big.
3. Your fonts are pretty bad, no offence. Here's some basic starter fonts that you can't really go wrong with: CCVictory Speech, Spinner Rack BB, Wild Words. More complete sheet below.
4. You usually need to add a white stroke to your text if it's floating/on top of background art else it becomes hard to read.

General: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/
Typesetting: https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/
Redrawing: https://web.archive.org/web/20150421210157/http://www.redhawkscans.com/showthread.php?7057-Rain-s-Redraw-Tutorials
Font sheet: https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/902314557077336064/984489051686055966/unknown.png?ex=658462e0&is=6571ede0&hm=9d0bca1afc7aac4ec28bd0aced9101a7f5c0e492f0f1c71cac758fa1a2b71a93&
Posted on 10 December 2023, 03:58 by:   Jube    PM
Score +28
Hey, cheers for the feedback,

The font's fine, I like it. I'll check out the ones you listed though and see if I like them more. For the text, I wanted to make it nice and clear and readable, without reducing the size too much or getting it compressed with words broken over multiple lines. Maybe I erred too far on the side of caution, I'll try reduce the size more next time.

Ultimately, even with keeping it fairly simple and with only the small amount of redrawing, I did- translating, typesetting and arranging this as it is, it still took me a number of hours to get where I was happy with it. It's absolutely not a professional quality job, and I would be overjoyed if someone did want to spend that time on more Danmachi manga like this. But nobody seemed to be doing so, and the previous chapter got a fairly dubious Spanish translation instead, so I thought I'd step up and at least offer a simple, if not beautiful, job.
Posted on 11 December 2023, 22:39 by:   alcantarilla    PM
Score +16
Thanks a lot for the translation! Also, I personally would recommend the sequel because I prefer series these to be translated in the right order, but it's up to you to choose what to do honestly.Great job!
Posted on 30 December 2023, 18:35 by:   valefor33    PM
Score +22
That last panel got me laughing with how far removed Bell's package is relative to where his crotch should be.

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