Let me know if it needs any corrections.

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Page 4: "agani" should be "again"
Page 6: "I wish I was good switch spots with him right now" should probably be "I wish I was good enough to switch spots with him right now"

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Yoshida Gorou is definetly the best TS artist of the current day, nothing but fluffy happiness and fulfilled desires <3

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In page 25, "mainden" should be "maiden".

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wow i've been waiting for this to get tl'd for a long time thanks! i hope you'll do the next parts also

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Instead of just being a generic frilly girl he could just become a sexy tomboy. That would work way better.

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I don't understand why you used "middle school" on pages 10, 11, and 16. In the raw, page 10 refers to "子供服” (literally, "kids clothes"), and 11 and 16 are "小学生”, referring to Japanese students at grades 1 to 6. The backpack worn there is an elementary school backpack that isn't used in Japanese middle school (grades 7-9), and the clothes are kids clothes because school uniform requirements become stricter starting in middle school. The gap between the character's real age and the clothes they're wearing is the point.

You don't have to use the words "elementary school" or "grade school" if you don't want to (like, the reference on page 16 is fundamentally more about stages of physical development than school years), but "middle school" is inaccurate in each of the three cases, even with the overlap in what constitutes "middle school" in different countries.

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@anontl Fixed it.

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cute, now we need to wait for the sequels!

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