The version you're using is not the digital, but a scan of the physical book.
Truthfully, if you can't even understand the difference between the two then you shouldn't be taking commissions.
The actual digitals are here: https://e-hentai.org/g/2794340/f102ba7201/

As for the rest of it, you ought to learn the basics like leveling if you're going to be using scans.
On the TL aspect, you're sticking too close to the Japanese that it makes little to no sense in English.
Same goes for wording consistencies, you use vagina for one bubble and then use pussy for the rest. IMO you should never use vagina except for specific cases.

Resources: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/

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thx for the input
I'll take note of it

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Korean
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English You are here!

Series part : あなたの種回収します2
Japanese digital
Chinese digital, translated by 白杨汉化组

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The raw and this one have prostitution tag but she is just doing government mandated job. is it really prostitution?

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having sex for money is prostitution even if it's some fictional government job.

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His name is Kita Yamato and she is here to collect his SEED. Nice Gundam reference haha.

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>bored/ignored obligatory service sex
>becomes vanilla half way through
Many such cases. At least he got 19 pages of it right.

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