fyi

006
OG: 最初は造形のモデルとして呼ばれていたのだが
TL: "At first, she called me her personal model"
ED: the original doesn't say personal model but I assume you just copied from pg 4

OG: ほんほ？
TL: Mmf~
ED: this isn't a moan

007
OG: 次はこっちでもシてあげる
TL: "Next time, let's do it here"
ED: I think the only accurate parts are "next" and "do it"

OG: いつ見てもスゲえ
TL: "She's amazing..."
ED: incomplete TL

008
OG: ガマン汁だらだら
TL: N/A

009
OG: 生きモンみてぇだ…
TL: "My god, it's like I'm in heaven"
ED: this line is completely made up

010
OG: きゅん きゅん
TL: Breeding Breeding
ED: made up sfx

OG: 「おちんぽ欲しいよぉ♡」ってキュンキュンしてる…♡
TL: "I want your dick! I wan't your dick! Please give it to me!"
ED: she's not begging for it here

OG: 挿入れるよー
TL: "you can put it in"
ED: this isn't her giving permission

011
OG: 全部搾り取ろうという…っ！
TL: "I'm gonna squeeze you dry~"
ED: wrong speaker

013
OG: カリこすれて気持ちいっ♡
TL: "He's scraping my insides, it feels so good!"
ED: incomplete TL, she's very specific here

OG: いいとこ当たってるこの角度いい♡
TL: "This angle is perfect! Don't you dare fucking stop!"
ED: this is kind of rewritey

014
OG: これが造形神の力かよっ
TL: "Is this the power of a god"
ED: not just any god

OG: もっと楽しませてっ
TL: "Let's have more fun!"
ED: not plural

etc

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Japanese (RAW, Digital): https://e-hentai.org/g/1877023/70a8c464bb/
Chinese (Translation, Digital): https://e-hentai.org/g/1883812/a3324987e1/

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vote down translated tag, this isn't translated.
it's a rewrite.

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terrible translation

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