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Read online:
https://namicomi.com/en/title/HSgPE5Rk/demon-fable
https://mangadex.org/title/1e68af69-73ca-42ca-bdca-f636f6186828/demon-fable

pg001: Ch:1 - The Fool
pg068: Ch:2 - Ill-Gotten Goods pt.1
pg104: Ch:3 - Ill-Gotten Goods pt.2

Remember to fight cumbrain by masturbating once a day.

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I can't wait to read this story again without all the fun stuff!!!!!!

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I wonder if the artist is going to have another breakdown once he realizes his sfw art is going to be much less popular.

EDIT: He even removed Lilith's armpit hair, because that would be very lewd indeed... lol...

EDIT2: On ch2 we learn that for the artist porn is bad, but goat gore is totally okay!

Last edited on 26 August 2023, 22:11.

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Arts still great at least

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Why he didn't just settle with using both concepts in the first place?

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So uh what's the reason they decided to do a SFW rendition?

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@reaper01 they had a breakdown and rationalized that porn was desensitizing men to intimacy and sex. Men were paying more attention to porn instead of going to look for a real person and they decided they didnt want to be a part of that. So they said they wouldnt be doing any more NSFW content and instead going to try to be wholesome.

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@Buffyakadan
Thats fucking retarded.

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I'll give it a try, at least. However, so far I feel like Rickert lacks the same energy he used to have, and I really don't like how Lilith just has a normal mouth now.

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Don't really mind that much. I understand the attempt pretty well. Sometime the good characters or even story inspiration can stem from hardcore NSFW material (Like Hellsing manga) . If the artist felt a need to overhaul everything from the start for the sake of story they want to tell or create, I'm always gleefully supporting them.

@RabidTanker I can't said much for the artist since its their own reason. But I things might have going down like:

- Initial NSFW concept came from a simple "Magic Gone wrong" which end up in a hillarious chain of events (Usually end up with pretty hardcore sex)
- The artist at first using a simple trope. An apprentice of magic, A "Succubus", An Elf, A knight etc etc. Whichas the original NSFW progress, These character start to be fleshen out bit by bit enough to having their own characteristic.
- Thing is if the artist having a certain story or narration on their mind which going further than "weekly fuck" to every character you meet since there are one concurrent character with the ability and the intention to do so on almost everyone "she" meet. Well, whatever plot they may have coming up with will always end up with big fat cock ramming into someone asses or vagina. Which might not be very good if , again, you want to telling a certain story.

So minus on the public breaking down. Judgning from the overall skill of creating a comic and all. I think this "reboot" might have a thing to do with the creator's delimma.on drawing just porn and want to make a good story + porn or just a story, That kind of thing.

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The dumbest thing about this guys "PoRn iS bAd" breakdown is he presents it like the stuff he did was loving and sensational. It was mostly rape.
And he's also basically betraying the community that picked him up. 'Cause honestly, he really wouldn't have taken off without the TD&A.

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Well I wish him the best if the author is on a quest of self improvement although I think it's more that just porn fucking up society.
Does that mean no more of the porn version though and if so is the place for it?

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Rickert and the Witche's face feel a bit off. Lilith looks good in concept art

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Remembering the original was mostly based on the succubus harassing others and the 2/3 of art was NSFW...
It'd be reasonable to start a new story from a scratch with new characters, then redo the old one )

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To me it was not a problem that the author wanted to start SFW stuff. I am all for it even if they reboot their old stuff but he was acting like porn was the problem and how bad it is and how fucked people are without looking at his own content because yeah can't say it is vanilla. Like he could have just said I don't feel like doing porn at the moment and want to focus on SFW stuff but oh well.

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NSFW or SFW it still good artwork. Sure there is no more fun bits showing but at least the story will go on. Now that is said I disagree with author on desensitization but that is a difference of opinions. Honestly is sounds like a bit of self projection where the project snowballed into a dark territory that the author didn't like after a self evaluation and saw an ugly side of themselves. Enough of the amateur pysche session and I'm still going to enjoy since I like the premise albiet the cliches.

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Necromancer doesn't really know......or care probably......what the term 'Reincarnate' means.......or maybe she just doesn't want to waste such a high level spell when 'Animate Dead' will do ^_^

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As others have commented, they could have just said they wanted to focus on SFW stuff. And it's not like any of his work could easily reflect reality considering its subject matter. Truthfully, it might have been smarter just to make an entire new cast of characters and story considering how much the NSFW stuff was intrenched into the core of the story. Not only would it give them more freedom but it wouldn't come out feeling like a Frankenstein's plot filled with conflicting tones and ideas.

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Is Rickert like 12?

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Well, I guess I'm glad hes getting better, drawing Rick and morty porn is absolute rock bottom patheticness

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This guy made a 400 page comic in like the span of a year and some change and he wants to reboot it...I smell burn out. Like seriously, if this was a webcomic this could've been years worth of updates:
Bi-weekly: 15 years
Weekly: 7 years
Double: 3.5 years
Triple: 1.75 years

The last two are somethingthat takes a team to do or taking shortcut like that Tim guy.

Last edited on 04 March 2023, 02:18.

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Tumblr art sucks ass go back to detailed porn

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SFW reboot?...i mean, i love your style but...why?

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@Ignitation
While partly true, I want to say, screw that noise.

I hated when 774 abandoned all their awesome NSFW content when they went mainstream with Nagatoro.

If only it had been Princess Honoka hentai ala Taimanin Asagi instead.

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@OtleChip
>I hated when 774 abandoned all their awesome NSFW content when they went mainstream with Nagatoro.
Yeah and artists like CoolKyou show you don't need to stop the degenerate R18 shit to go mainstream, just do both and tell anyone to fuck off.
Its a fucking waste and i don't get the point.

You can also just tell a good story with porn, its very doable.

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@ezequiell

Alfie is a good example of that....albiet slow...

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Well, at least the hellish nature of black magic explains why Lilith showed up. Other than that it looks like this guy is just burnt out, period.

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Well, good luck to the artist in the new pursuits. But the sad thing is now readers will never know how the NSFW version would've ended.

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Shame the artist dropped the original, it was very good and I was looking forward to stuff with the elf girl. I honestly don't get their reasoning.

@Buffyakadan That line of reasoning is ridiculous, I look at porn to rub one out and relax after a stressful day, not because I have intimacy issues. Also I'm a massive introvert that doesn't like being around people in general honestly, if I had the means to live like a hermit I would because I enjoy my solitude.

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I was the first person to share this artist's works in here, it's still such a pity he decided to throw everything away because "porn bad".

Plus for everyone who was in for the plot, the reboot remains basically uninteresting, Mirabelle is still in the current comic, while in the old one we last saw her 4 and a half volumes ago, in other words, there's still so much story beat to rethread, and sure, without the sex its probably going to be a faster ride to whenever the new comic will differ from the old one, but so far we're just reading the same story again.

Also, as a guy who has been checking porn sites since 2009 (AerisDies my beloved...), the so called "porn addiction" of mine didn't stop me for being in a happy relationship with my fiancée, who doesn't mind it.

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I do think the comic is interesting but I think Lillith looked cooler before. Not everything has to be nsfw if it was before.

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WHY MASTER PENCIL? Why are you drawing better in this watered down sfw heresy?

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Is it me or is Rickerts nose getting worse

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@Mars11 I didnt name you specifically. I was talking about the artist of this comic. Based off of what they said, that was the issue they were having. I personally am different as well and in some ways they same as you. I am an introvert to the extent that I only like hanging out with 2 or 3 people.

Porn hasnt hurt my relationships in the past. Most of my relationships were us actually looking at porn together and sharing with each other which ones we liked best. If anyone is having issues in their relationships then porn isnt the reason. Anyone who thinks it is is denying the real issue. Communication or the lack thereof is the issue. To be fair if your looking at porn when your partner has specifically asked you not to when you have them then that might be a problem. but if you communicate with your partner and just be like "hey, I like porn and erotic novels and ect. If that is a problem for you then tell me. if you wish me not to look at porn anymore then just tell me. but if you dont have a problem with it then im going to continue."

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@nicrocon
It's going full Tumblr nose.

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This is why you don’t write comics with a mental illness folks. You either write 500 pages of bs or you redo your one comic over and over again.

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>SFW Reboot

"We Were on the Verge of Greatness"

Last edited on 26 April 2023, 03:49.

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As long as I get to see the elf be cute.

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@ezequiell
I really hope that isn't a permanent thing, and that he someday goes back to doing nsfw stuff again, cause he's seriously one of the best hentai mangaka ever.

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While I've got to admit that I loved the NSFW version as combination story and wank material, I also don't mind a purely SFW version. I hadn't been a huge fan of the way the bodies were drawn and I think I'm happier with these slightly more restrained body types.

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Am I crazy or is the art of the actual characters (specifically things like expressions) weirdly worse quality/more samey than before, when this dude was just making funny porn with story?

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I feel like uploading this here is insult to injury.

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Might be an unpopular opinion but I feel like the writing is improved, even if we did drop to a pg-13 rating for stupid reasons

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Well I'm glad we get to see more regardless. I'm liking the story and hopefully this time the elf girl gets treated more sweetly

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Lmao who the fuck is gonna want to reread the same shit but without the porn? Fking delusional artists that think that they can do a 180 and still do the same numbers they used to. Nothing I despise more than moralfags telling me that pornography is bad for me.

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Well, we've got around an year to say that if his writing actually improved. Maybe it'll be an lot shorter, considering how long (and entertaining) the sex scenes were.

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This demon's expressions and attitude is fucking great. The "You summoned a demon by mistake. Are you shitting me?" panel is straight up good shit.

I think it's good storytelling and don't have an issue with the writing. There's a whole buncha porn stories on here, but the non-porn stuff can be great too - there's one Bowsette series with no sex that's the best thing on this damn site I reckon.

I hope the artist/writer continues here.

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the sfw reboot is certainly upsetting, but what i'm most upset about is that nobody archived his twitter stuff before they deleted it, since i'm fairly confident r34 doesn't have all their stuff.

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i like the new Lilith design

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Yeah no.. i think they lost their mind and decided to redo shit without porn.
Just do the fucking porn, make money.. and stop with the BS..

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A bizarre bit of self-flagellation from the artist, softened a bit by them sticking around to continue to make stuff. It always sucks when an artist decides to vanish, and Pencil has that kind of sketchy, rough style I like seeing. Besides, not everything here has to be porn.
I just hope he kept the original stuff around if he decides to 180 again. It'll go a lot quicker if he doesn't have to redraw every page.

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The art style has gotten worse.

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"what the fuck man" The demon's reactions to his beginer's luck is straight up hilarious.

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this is stupid

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Yes, but it's the FUN kind of stupid

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I dont care if he decided to make it SFW, fine, whatever. I DO care that he picked the the most boring mid2010s tumblr artstyle possible, made the elf less cute, made rickert less likable, snd completely sanded off any interesting edge. Fucking shame.

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Compared to the previous work I feel like the quality has gone like WAY down.

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Story-wise or is it just the artstyle?

Because the bit with the goats is new, obviously. But it also comes off as an "seriously, this is what you're going with?" moment

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I may not like the logic of the author for turning this in to a sfw comic but as long as the vibe of the original is still there, ill keep reading I'm pissed im basically back to the beginning but whatever, as long as Rickert is still a boy with a heart of gold that will still patch up his would be thief im fine, i do wonder how she's gonna get hurt this time around just getting the shit beat outta her i assume by lilith.

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Holy fuck, this bandit is showing the worst judgement the world has known since that one salaryman squared up to Godzilla for spilling his whiskey.

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Demon sex BAD! But animal gore GOOD! Sorry Pencil Sensei but... repent. Abort this travestry, make amends with the public and continue the NSFW story.

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In all fairness, the kid is the perfect target for pickpocketing by an bandit...Just not on an old-ass ropes & planks bridge

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shouldn't this be put under the category of western?

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Fraisercrane, western is supposed to be for the NSFW stuff; this is more or less an attempt to rewrite an clean version of it

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I'm fucking laughing my ass off at this latest page. Just throwing him at the tree, cheerfully calling from the river. This comic is funny as shit..

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Goes SFW but still baits coomers - what are pages 84 and 85 supposed to be if not that? I really hope pencil does a 180 because while I don't mind a SFW parallel storyline it's just really funny that they are edging back towards NSFW with like the pinups. Pick a lane!

Edit: OK with page 88 up he's GOTTA be trolling. Hmm yes masturbation and porn bad, but teasing softcore shit is a-OK. Again, pick a lane!

Last edited on 18 November 2023, 02:32.

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November is started and yet this travestry still Goes on... REPENT PENCIL SAMA! MAKE AMENDS AND GO BACK NSFW!

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But on the other hand, we barely have an reason to feel bad for the thief... Probably

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The Watch does not stop in December... REPENT, MASTER PENCIL! IT'S NOT TOO LATE! EMBRACE THE NFSW LIGHT !

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Well, at least the "disguise" is more convincing. But this guy is an hack for reusing the same lines.

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Since he’s gone sfw I wonder if any if all major acts of violence will be taken out too, while I don’t want to see the elf girl get her shit pushed in, but it was a big part of the story before.

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Enjoying this new version so far but the only positive for no sex I can see is that we won't have Lilith butt fuck Rickert in this.

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Speak for yourself, man. The anal fisting scene was one of the funniest things that I've seen on here.

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Missed the chance to have big red burst through the wall with an "OH YEAAAAAAH!"

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Kinda weird for him to be concerned about the church, if you think about it

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Maybe it's not concern so much as curiousity? Little guy wants to wield some unholy power, set a few churches ablaze himself. Next thing he'll be listening to Norwegian Black Metal.

Base +6

I can understand bleaching the work to have something you can show your parents without it being a thing.

But this...just feels like it has a NSFW shaped hole in it. We are seeing 3 chapters, and it has about the content of a single chapter. It is a pacing issue- originally, the SFW parts were set up for the NSFW parts in each chapter. Now, it is only SFW parts, and they areonly work as set up for the punchline "the chapters are short and don't really go anywhere".

This also creates issues with characterization. In the SFW version, I feel like this is just a series of things that just happen without any overarching point or theme. The NSFW version had Lilith encountering problems, and she responds with cruelty and self satisfaction until she switches it to her being "THE" problem. the NSFW set up an air of hedonistic cruelty from Lilith.

Of course, Lilith sexual cruelty is also "THE" problem here. It was likely something the artist had to step back from- the last time I checked was during the 1950's wife beating jokes.

But all these issues combine, and I am forced to wonder if this work can be salvaged at all, or if it is better to step away and work on something fresh from the ground up. No shame in it, sometime you just got to know when to start over instead of trying to jerry rigging something you already scrapped. Maybe come back to this later when you aren't as tied up in memories of what this once was.

Base +6, ceslzie +6, Cousinmuscle +6, Yggdrasil99 +7, illegalcheese +9, JoemasterHigh +6, italicus +20

Yeah, this one is more or less doomed without the sexual violence, unfortunately. Granted, it was certainly over the top; but I think that this it's an little bit too early to declare this an complete failure

Base +26, ceslzie +6, Cousinmuscle +6

I wouldn't say it has to be sexual violence. But general indiscriminate violence might be necessary. Currently, the only really notable thing she has done is kill a farm animal. Which just goes a but on the "neutral barbarian" scale of things.

You don't really get much of a feel for her being a "demon". We need her more as a cruel bully. I think the elf shaped punching bag could serve nicely for that.

This could dovetail nicely into character development as the kid reigns her in and she improves on this... eventually aspiring to the level of only "discriminate" violence against acceptable targets.

Base +6, kikimaru024 +30

Yeah, but given the way things are going with this guy, all we'll probably get is another shouting match or two with the elf and the milf knight than anything interesting.

For some reason, I think that the porn wasn't the only thing that made the artist loose his shit. But it is, what it is; and there's usually someone else who's willing to pick up the torch for that kind of stuff

Base +26

Suture worms are a rather cool idea, huh

Base +10, kikimaru024 +30, Gullman +8

Ah yes the cringelord that denounced NSFW. Lemme just half star this real quick

Base +6, puzzlingtons +6, Gullman +8, Deathspank23 +6