Big fan of Netorase here. Hit me up on Discord (stupidity1159) if there's any untranslated Netorase or wanna comission me for scanlation work.

Unnecessary/Missing word(s) on page 8; 'the old man from earlier more amazing' should be 'the man from earlier was amazing'
'the man from earlier was more amazing' or 'the man from earlier was even more amazing' was probably what you were going for; which wouldn't be unacceptable either, just not quite as literal/accurate

Base +3, blarg321 +6