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Previous Japanese: https://e-hentai.org/g/2649365/825210796d/
Previous English: https://e-hentai.org/g/2717373/b58a22e292/

I can't speak for the translation quality, but the English is really awkward. Besides the spelling mistakes, some expressions and sentences are really weird... Like for example page 5's "All of master's cum has been seduced into letting me steal every last drop of it away from her, however..."

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I nutted several times to this author's works and this translation makes it a whole lot more enjoyable than copy-pasting google image translate, one at a time.
I'm going to go back and nut several more times at this series.

Damn, I'm a coomer, aren't I?

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@topkebab Facominn as a author tends to use really bizarre phrases and expressions in all of his work. This can even be seen in translations that aren't mine as well.

https://e-hentai.org/g/2693218/377a0001cd/
https://e-hentai.org/g/2334922/c0349e0114/
https://e-hentai.org/g/2132237/bc91095a41/

He uses the same phrases over and over again like "Seduce your cum", "Relentless tit fucking/paizuri", "Going to heaven". He was obsessed with using the word "Peeled back" for ages in his earlier work, and I have no idea what the hell he's thinking whenever he compares boobs to dipers, but these are all the things he does.

In another persons translation of Mippai 3, a similar sentence can be seen in: "The sperm that I kept by titty-fucking you, seducing and changing the other sperms mind!". If you really look you'll see the same few phrases repeated constantly in his work irregardless of translator.

This isn't to say i'm making excuses, if I have done a bad job making things read better that is my fault. That page 5 example could 100% been a lot better. I will also take full blame not properly doing a read over before publishing for spelling mistakes.I'll try harder next time to avoid these issues.

Last edited on 02 October 2024, 12:00.

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The problem isn't the expressions, they aren't that weird for hentai, it's the syntax. "[it] has been seduced into letting me steal every last drop of it away from her(...)" reads very awkwardly because of the way the words are chained, there's too many different tenses and the subject keeps bouncing around. Unless the original is as awkward to read, you should change something. Just changing to active voice already makes it a lot easier to read. "I've seduced all of master's cum into letting me steal every last drop of it away from her." The seduce into let into steal sequence is still awkward, but is already very well into the realm of 'good enough', while still maintaining that hentai bizarreness. If you cut down the let verb you have "I've seduced all of master's cum to steal every last drop of it away from her." which loses some emphasis on the whole stealing thing, so you might not want that.

I gave it a proper, non-horny reread and the problem is a lot smaller than I thought, page 5 was just really jarring and left me on edge for the rest of the initial read, it's almost only spelling mistakes. Sorry about that. Anyways, just please keep doing translations, they're far better than the MTL abomination that is taking over.

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I desperately want to see a continuation of Rin's punishment, that looks incredible.

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I desperately want to see a continuation of Rin's punishment, that looks incredible.

Last edited on 21 March 2025, 04:45.

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So weird... We asian can hardly accept this kind...

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