05: rude!
- interjection, probably better with a vocative => so rude! / you rude!
08: this feel
- third person => this feels
09: Your squeezing
- auxiliary => You are squeezing / You're squeezing
12: Quite the sensitive little thing
- different subject than the next clause, so it should be explicit => You're quite the sensitive little thing
15: kill... ...you
- considering the right bubble is also higher, the content should probably be swapped

Also you shouldn't omit periods.

Base +11