Hello This is my first work that I uploaded :3

The story of a little boy who always bullies his friends, but over time he has a strange oddity and makes his hobby hidden, over time he starts to get addicted and it turns out that is his punishment in the past

I am trying to use a comic style with 1 to 2 panels in a vertical layout to make it easier to read, but if it's still hard to read, I will change the style in the next version :D

Chapter 1 :
https://e-hentai.org/g/3181145/3761280fac/
https://mizuzu.fanbox.cc/posts/9157793
https://www.patreon.com/posts/karma-first-full-120930494

Chapter 2 :
https://e-hentai.org/g/3190740/17c4bb5849/
https://mizuzu.fanbox.cc/posts/9192211
https://www.patreon.com/posts/karma-first-full-120930494

Chapter 3 :
https://e-hentai.org/g/3217080/3a3144bf6f/
https://mizuzu.fanbox.cc/posts/9211730
https://www.patreon.com/posts/karma-first-full-120930494

Support me if you intresting with my comic :3
early access in my fanbox/patreon

https://www.patreon.com/c/Mizuzu
mizuzu.fanbox.cc
https://www.pixiv.net/en/users/112232562

welcome to E-H

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Congratulations to your first comic.

It could be much improved by fixing the grammar (maybe have a native speaker (i.e. not me) proof-read it?
You mix up singular/plural ("Is this really my clothes?" -> "ARE THOSE really my clothes?"), you are leaving out words ("I'm so excited to wear"), you are using verbs in incorrect forms ("I forgot wash my clothes" => "I forgot TO wash my clothes", "I'm look [...]" => "I'm lookING"),...

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@tgtfbrasil thanks you :3

@D.rkGl.ss Thank you for the correction. I have some difficulty expressing myself in English, but I will try to improve my grammar in the future :D

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Put him a cage

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@Killershaodw117 I will do, and will make it more feminine in the next chapter

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if you need help with grammar/editing more then a few people here would like to help.

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b@ity thanks for the offer, maybe I'll fix it myself first, if it's still bad maybe I'll ask for help.

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