Hello guys!

I decided to change the way I update the comics, instead of spending a whole month rendering and then update gallery, I'll update once a week at least.

I also decided, as you already noticed, to present my comics in a way similar to a traditional comic book. I took this decision because I believe it respects more the time and attetion spam you readers deposit in my work.

So what are you thinking about the comics until now? I am a beginner and i believe there is a lot room for improvement.

So, if you want to support me, and only if you want to, you can go to: https://www.patreon.com/ChocoH4z3.

You need a skilled English speaker to re-write your text, it's terrible.

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What a mess. Looks and reads like an incoherent patchwork.

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gothprincess279

Care to elaborate? I am genuinely looking for ways to improve.

Base +6, peligromayor +2

Pretty good comic! I think the pacing is a bit fast - I'd have preferred a more gradual corruption than simply sex from the get-go - but that's more of a personal preference. The conversations at the beginning felt a little robotic, but it seems to have smoothed out, and the grammar and layout of the panels is generally fine - people just like to complain on the internet. Keep going; it's a fun read, and I'm interested to see what's next!

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@lafn
the pacing of it feels very rushed. It was hard to keep track of what was going on after he walks into the kitchen.

As for a comic that also has a story tied to it, it felt weirdly off. Events happened and everyone just went with it. Sure works for a sex-driven story but then it feels more like a white-room fuck where things just happen so people can fuck if you catch my drift.

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I rewrote the first chapter, you ok with that? and what do you think? https://e-hentai.org/g/3306201/b15260b495/

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@SuperrPervert

Yes. It's okay, I don't mind.

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