I do these translations as a hobby and I think my typesetting has become better since my first translations. I still need to improve in my translations and cleaning though. If someone has a forum on how to improve on cleaning I'd be happy. Anyways this one doesn't have any sex scenes or anything like that, it's basically pure story but seeing melusine being corrupted. Enjoy
@Coledas UKgent Thanks a lot Coledas Ukgent!! It's hard for me to improve and get better at this alone since i dont really know where to look for help with improving these skills. That's why i really appreciate you going out of your way to link places for me to get tips on how to improve! I might take some time off to improve on my skills to hopefully improve. I hope you have a great day or night.
a banger like this is why I still un-do artist cg and image set filter every time, even though something this kino only comes out about once every 4-5months
Feels like I lost brain cells reading this shit. When the author needs me to be just as retarded as the cuck he writes to enjoy this you can already tell how shit this is going to be. Anyways, couldn't the cuck just have used one of those command spells right there and order her to kill him and then kill herself? I'm not a fatefag as you can tell but then again god knows what happens in this retarded hentaiverse.
Looking at your previous works along this one, for typesetting I can highly recommend using different fonts according to the work you're doing. CC Wild Words and CC Victory speech are the most commonly used font for speech bubbles. It would also help a lot to center the text within them. In this work, the way you align the text is good. But you could try using a font that is closer to the one the game uses. There are some areas where the english could use some rewording to sound more natural, but otherwise good job.