Feels like Pages 23 and 24 need to be switched to flow more naturally. Because why would Emerald say switch, and then we get an extra panel of Blake going at it. Unless we get a panel of her fully pulling out.

And also Pages 42 and 43, is something I think needs to be switched also. In 41 we got Emerald cleaning out Weiss to try to wake her up, and so she can have a go at Harriet, and then in 42 we have Weiss getting up going at Harriet’s ass. And then next page in 43 have Emerald cleaning out Harriet for Weiss’s use? That doesn’t make much sense.

Other than those page switches everything else seems solid.

Base +4