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very good!

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Still can't believe she's got a symbol of Khorne on her boob.

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Great work. Much better than the other "translation"

Only 1 thing. Her line on page 12 I think is mistranslated. She's saying that he's got an opportunity to use her naked body.
https://e-hentai.org/s/c58f639f65/3054228-12

Base +6, Darknessend +7, Suriles -4

All speech bubbles should end in punctuation.
Pg 8, wrong speaker, Commander is referring to himself in third person, "No… that's a delicate area, and I haven't trimmed my nails… A-and… it’s right after you were ra-… roughly handled…"
Pg 12, wrong speaker, "Seriously... You have someone practically naked in front of you and that's what you say?"
Pg 22, "Is it okay" should be "Are you sure?"
Pg 28, the explanation doesn't work when it's no longer a single word, "crammed all those complicated feelings into a single roar"
Pg 34, "Really? I don't understand" would be "Really? I wouldn't know."
Pg 37, brough-> brought

Base +6, GEJLABARA +4, Darknessend +7, Lyncs +13

Thanks for the correction @A0_ & @ozuuma123, much appreciated! I will make sure to update the gallery and correct it!

Also, to answer some of @ozuuma123's corrections:
>All speech bubbles should end in punctuation.
I do that intentionally, cause I don't like the way it looks on the bubble, so I don't think I will change how I usually do it (unless there's some occasion that I have to).

>Pg 8, wrong speaker, Commander is...
>Pg 12, wrong speaker, "Seriously... "
I'm quite unsure about this one too, so thanks again for the correction!

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i really like the art style and expressions fit very well.. but i think image quality could improve a lot. Since you changed black level the noise of the RAW scan show up more and you also lose shading, since the black point could be different for every page and it doesnt understand what are dark elements that it should keep.
if you look at top of page 19, those hairs ended up black clipped with removed details. It would be better to first remove the noise and then use a better system to add gradual constrast, since such a scan will always have a limited tonal range compared to a digital raw.
I can help you with this, but i also noticed from the author socials that he posted screens of a high resolution digital version, im not sure if someone have that?
btw he also shared screens of a sequel i guess ^o^

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There's a Khorne mark above Crow's left boob, do the Nikke publishers have a deal with Games Workshop or something?

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Good art, but the story doesn't make sense within the game's context.

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Lmao!
Why is there the mark of the Blood God on her chest?!

Base +6, Darknessend +7

Crow really is the best.

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