my first time trying to translate a work, being helped by a translator and i mainly edit the text and cleaning it, i hope you guys like it, any input and suggestions are more than welcomed !

original gallery : https://e-hentai.org/g/3176494/6958f50f99

you should've also hired an editor and better translator because honestly I'd rather read MTL than this

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why translate the second before the first?

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@widag

I've had some bottlenecks with my chapter 1 translators, i mainly work on the cleaning and editing, but with chapter 2 done, the translator will be shifting their focus on chapter 1, so we'll get it done asap

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It's better than MTL, but there are a lot of grammatical errors.

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>Release Chapter 2 without Chapter 1

Why do you do this. Who hurt you, man.

@Defonotzkab

If you have Chapter 1 in the pipeline, then like... just wait till 1 is done, and release them together. Releasing Chapter 2 alone just makes it seem like you're one of those dickheads that releases a single middle chapter out of a story tankoubon and leaves.

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@Vancleave

Hello 👋

Sorry to disappoint you, i have some circumstances that let me work on something like this only for the next few weeks, so i felt like i have to post it asap so i can get the feedback for the next work to be better (i want open audience feedback) and it apparent my work needs much improvement, so I'll do the next one better !

And dont worry, i will finish chapter 1 because i already cleaned the text and ready to shove in the english translation, this time i will proofread it with more parties before releasing it

Once again, apologies for the inconvenience, i will take it as a lesson for next time, please kindly wait for the next chapter.

Best regards

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So this is a Love Mary knock off?

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@Cozzy121
Calling it a knockoff is doing it a favor. The build-up and delivery of the evil fall is garbage and of course it isn't continued in the 3rd volume. Instead you need to read through 35 pages of flashback scenes which should have been in this part before you get to see the actual meat of the story again. Spent way to much panel time trying to build up the "I'm a boy, but magically because who fucking knows how - I can turn into a girl" and it completely botched Seren's evil fall. I don't care if Satou wants to draw TS characters, but his dancing around and pretending like nobody saw it coming and using it as the main reason Seren gives up is so retarded and took up way too many pages. The dialogue is also a lot worse than I thought and really doesn't do the story any favors at all. The art is amazing and the designs and outfits are awesome, but that's about the only praise this story should get. "My Wife" IMAGINE THAT, little boy that turns into a girl IMAGINE THAT, Seren has a sister who will also turn out to be a magical girl and get corrupted IMAGE THAT! It's almost like Satou can only tell one story

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