Hello this is my first time translating and cleaning/redrawing
I'm learning Japanese and using these to practice, especially the Kanji
I'm searching it up if i saw new kanji and translating them within the context
Since English is not my first language too
Any feedback is appreciated
Thank you very much

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No major errors from what I can see with a quick read through. That being said I question translating from a language you are learning into a language that is not your native language.

Base +6

page 3 torn should be tear

Base +8