Raw https://e-hentai.org/g/2933084/3b077d0288/

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tagging rtl

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they returned to normal after long period of being a fleshlight? I wish there was consequence from mind breaking

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Was excited for a second, then I realized this shit is just MTL. Barely readable drivel. I don't even know how the TL on page 21 got so botched either. She's not complaining that she stopped squirting, which makes no sense you tool. She is complaining that she won't stop leaking, since obviously the moist trail is giving their position away. It's sad that Shirabe Shiki's work constantly gets the shaft like this.

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Meccaflare you would be correct It is an AI translation. No its not perfect. but If you think that it can be improved do let me know where it can be improved.

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I also noticed that you linked the Chinese version as the 'raw'. It's not. I really hope this wasn't translated from the Chinese version. Most Chinese versions are machine translation-based, and translating a translation, especially a poor one, is the easiest way to produce poor quality work. Anyway, I'm not going to list the errors, as it would take hours, as there are hundreds of corrections needed. At that point, it would make more sense for me to create my own proper version. But I'll leave you with a couple of tips. First, if a page doesn't make sense, the translation is poor. Period. Secondly, if you're not a native English speaker, don't bother. Nobody wants to read poor-quality work that has been proofread by someone who barely speaks English.

Last edited on 07 December 2025, 14:23.

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Meccaflare Very good to know This would be the first ive heard of Chinese Translations being AI I will keep that in mind when i choose to do anymore the feed back helps me to understand. Its only my first few attempts hopefully going forward I will produce better work.. Thanks for the input and feed back :D As for speaking proper English yes i am a native to English Other languages aren't my strong suit. And you are also correct with the proof reading i didnt do any of that on the 4 i posted. i will have to do so moving forward.

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Not personality excretion, please tag things properly.

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