raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/3737396/eac8c694f9/
artist: https://x.com/nanagouki07

Exit 8 game didn’t take long to finish, around 15–30 minutes, and they even made 1.5-hour movie too (with Nana Komatsu in it).
game (2023): https://store.steampowered.com/app/2653790/The_Exit_8/
movie trailer (2025): https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=emZZexEJO8c

Indulging in sexual desires, the man has slowly become an anomaly himself before he realized it.

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It might not qualify for rough grammar with the number of mistakes, but a lot of unnatural English. Maybe you really need a QC?

p.4 "I am" -> "I'm" is more natural, but you could argue "I am" is for emphasis here.
p.8 "JK (High School Girl) -> Having an in-line TL note for JK then using JK for the rest of the work is extremely questionable imo. No reason to use JK, just use "high school girl" or "high schooler", even "schoolgirl" would be fine.
p.9 "JK's face is so damn tasty." -> This is completely unnatural as a result of your decision. If you really had to use JK, you should've put "A JK's face" at least (which looks fucking wack). Also, the original Japanese doesn't even use JK here, so not sure why you forced this in.
p.11 "0 (Zero)" -> Not sure why you needed to specify that 0 was zero, again this isn't in the Japanese.
p.13 "Minor's pussy tightness is insane" -> "A minor's pussy's tightness...", a second time forgetting an article, also needs possession on pussy. To avoid the double possession, you'd go with "A minor's pussy is insanely tight" or just omit "pussy" as the context is clear enough without it.
p.14 "JK's ass" -> "A JK's ass", missing article again
p.15 "Already hard again!?" -> "I'm already hard again?!", omitting the subject here isn't that natural in English (there are cases, but this isn't really one of them, especially when it makes the line more confusing)
p.18 "It's driving me nuts" -> "This is driving me nuts", this isn't wrong, but this flows better and stops you from having 3 consecutive lines starting with "It's." Alternatively, go with "I'm going fucking crazy"
p.18 "It's so good I can't stop thrusting my hips." -> Because you used "it" to refer to his libido (see p.15), starting a 3rd line in a row with "it's" can be confusing. You could again use "this feels so good" instead (this referring to him fucking her).
p.19 "This is really pushing it..." -> This is too vague. I needed to reread it to understand. "Doing more would be pushing it..." or something would be much clearer
p.20 "temptation" -> "temptations", maybe a nitpick, but it's more natural to assume more than just a single temptation (e.g. devil's temptations)
p.24 missing question mark
p.26 "pussy's" -> "pussy is", reverse contraction for better clarity, also just more natural to not contract this in English imo
"feel like..." -> "I feel like...", missing subject again, again not a case where you'd omit it
p.30 "I have to ignore it." / "Or I won't make any progress." -> More of a style choice, but it's better to use ellipses when separating a sentence: "I have to ignore it..." / ...or I won't make any progress."
p.32 At this point, since there have been multiple anomalies with multiple temptations, it'd be more consistent to change this to "anomalies' temptations" but technically this is fine
p.33 "Sucked me dry..." -> Omitting the subject here is fine, but I think it's a bit more natural to include it OR something like "Damn, sucked me dry" if you really want to drop the subject (but even still "Damn, she sucked me dry..." would be more natural)
p.34 "After that, the anomaly..." -> "After that, the anomalies..."
p.35 "the anomaly" -> "an anomaly", would make more sense for the context, but technically not wrong. Also these lines could use the ellipses I mentioned earlier. (P.S. the twins are great)
p.36 "If I just ignore the anomaly..." -> "anomalies" is also probably better here, but singular can technically work for this line

These are just based on your translation choices, but you could honestly be more liberal on a lot of lines to make them sound better, see https://e-hentai.org/g/3563726/8c7bb716e5/
(Also, I didn't really check the actual translation)
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Anyway, between this and nyuu's exit 8 parody, I love this concept. It's fucking great.

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I'd be curious to see the winning rate of people facing this temptation.

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Arent one of the rule is not having seg with the anomaly? Than arent dude just become an autofail unless you successfully runaway?

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peak like this only gets uploaded every few months. i think a tear rolled down my cheek...

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