That's a pretty cute font you got there for dialogue, good job on this! As for any errors, you did leave out the japanese dialogue on second page. Look at the "Well... when work does get busy..." line to see what I mean. Beside that, good job on this and I hope you consider doing more translations like this in the future.
@holybibble Thanks for the response! Font is Dynapuff. As for your comment on page 2, I left in the Japanese text but kind of brightened it up behind the English text, mostly because I wasn't really too big on doing redrawing. But overall, yes, just like your comment had said, I do think I did a good job on this. I may do more translations in the future if the idea ever does cross my mind sooner or later.