Are you translating from Korean or something? I can tell you used the Korean scans because of the cleaning, but the fact you somehow included a random Noona and the gallery has the fan translated Korean title instead of the Japanese one is... concerning. I hope this wasn't a commission as your typesetting is low effort, and you have numerous mistakes.

Pg3
"オフパコ"
Yours: "Offpako"
I mean, this one isn't wrong, but it's so lazy and reads terribly. IRL hookup, offline hookup, etc. You even translate it on pg 5.

Pg4
"おねえさん"
Yours: "Noona!"
Correction: "Onee-san!" (Hm.)

Pg5
"後悔しなやクソガキが”
Yours: "You're going to regret this, you little brat!"
Correction: "Don't go regretting this, you little brat!" (She isn't threatening to make him regret it, more that he better not change his mind after pushing so much.)

Pg7
"ほな、ほぐさんと…ね！！"
Yours: "Then I'll have to loosen you up... that won't do!!"
Correction: "Then I'll have to loosen you... up!!" (There really shouldn't be anything confusing about that ね.)

Just a couple of examples. I won't accuse you of using AI, as maybe you're still learning, but I am giving you the hard side eye.

Last edited on 27 June 2026, 11:10.

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tagging rtl

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fucking peak

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Ignore the comments, I think you did a good job mr editor it's perfectly understandable

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No need to suck someones dick for a barely passable translation. Like I hope it isn't AI or MTL... but it is rough.

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It's never going to be perfect for all here.

Always remember: Ignore the trolls, and give consideration and learn from constructive critiques.

Thank you for the time and effort you put into this, and posting it for free.

Hope we see more from you. : )

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