Needs proofreading. Grammar is weak and the phrasing is unnatural.

Unfortunately it gets worse with every page. Confusing losing with loosing should be a capital offense.

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"Delivery Assistance": it's a direct translation (MTL?) that in English turns the meaning to "assist for delivery (helping with deliveries)" instead of intended "assistance delivered to you". Maybe "Home Assist" would be better here?
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"Delivery Assistance": same
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"Ohh... This is not bad": nope, she says along the lines of "this is quite a mess" or "quite something".
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"Just as I taught": taught -> thought
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"getting too excite": excited
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"irresistable": irresistible
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"I'm loosing my strength": losing
"His fingers went in": this is not a thought bubble but direct speech, so "Your fingers"
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"I totally screwed up": if i understand correctly, this is the guy's speech bubble that says something along the lines of "you sprayed it everywhere" or "that was quite the squirt"
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"toung": tongue
"owerflowing salaiva": overflowing saliva (I'm getting pragnent vegana vibes...)
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"Look/I'm coming on your face": "Look" doesn't fit here, it's more in the sense of "Take this!"
"definetly": definitely
"going to far": going too far
"even tough": even though
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"I already feel pathetic the moment it went in": this should feel and sound wrong immediately for any human reader. Why the guy would feel pathetic, it doesn't make sense. So it's actually the girl who became pathetic. Again, MTL?
"owerflowing" again
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"it's embrassing": embarrassing
"you get wetter the embrassed you are": embarrassed, also probably would be better as "you get wetter as you get more embarrassed"?
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"loosing my innocence": losing
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"menuscript": manuscript
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"baththub": bathtub
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"plenry": plenty
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"thanks to the slud": is "slud" even a word? "Foam" would fit here.
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"whit this your pusy": with this your pussy
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"you're absolutely love having": you're absolutely loving having
"i'm going to fully cum": was he cumming partially before lol.
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"Phew... here we go again": oh hi CJ
"menuscript" again

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Thanks for the feedback.

I’m just learning japanese, and english isn’t my main either.
I will run the text through a spell check next time, altaugh it was checked by a native. (I know spell and context is not the same)

Anyway feel free to join the team and precheck everything I will be working on, if you would like.

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