Domo,

The previous translation was really bad, so I fixed it. However, it was difficult as the speech used between the two was quite awkward, so I made some re-writes.

Base +6, waltergeist -11

Shitnatsu is the ideal FMC for a NTR story.
I hope we can see Hina banging a Rusian gigachad gymnast someday....

Base +5, Reklof -13, electric_ant -6

More of a rewrite than a translation. Completely dropping Fujiki from the story as well.
I suppose you did a better job than the original artist atleast.
Chinatsu still comes off as slut-slop tho. But ig if that was the intention then so be it.
Also lol at her doubting Taiki's skills despite never having done it with him lol. Let's not forget he's an athlete as well...

Base +7