Needs to be cleaned better, and there's redrawing, cropping and rotating that needs to be done. Maybe consider working with an editor on future projects? That is assuming that you're a one man operation...

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Check our Cove of Translators forum, there are editors who I am sure would be happy to help a translator out.

Thanks for HNG translation. Still waiting for the second Birdy dojin :)

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holy crap!
Amano Ameno is my top favourite artist

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is this part of a series, or just a stand alone, the blurb in the beginning leads me to believe it's the former... and thanks for translating this.

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Some parts of the doujin do not need to be cleaned because that is part of the "personality" of the doujin. For example, reproduction by the printer of the artist's smudges on the paper should not be cleaned, yet I have noticed on a few OTHER doujinshi that the artist's smudges were "cleaned". To me, that is overly sterile and we lose each artistic work's individual personality if stuff like this is cleaned.

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http://www.doujinshi.org/book/77262/Akari-ha-M/
RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/238244/19367da661/
Thai Translation: https://e-hentai.org/g/572828/3b98ddc021/
Korean Translation: https://e-hentai.org/g/649251/d22bc4399b/

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A great story with a lovely main character.

Art 8. Plot 7. Sexiness 8. Translation 6. True to character 6. All out of 10.

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