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Music For Sarah 2 [English]

Western
Posted:2013-05-22 00:38
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Language:English  
File Size:2.32 MiB
Length:28 pages
Favorited:62 times
Rating:
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Average: 2.83

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Posted on 22 May 2013, 00:38 by:   grimest    PM
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Sarah's best friend Jovita is now a slave to!
Posted on 22 May 2013, 14:20 by:   dementio    PM
Score +15
Not bad. Definitely better English ;D

Also, use "I" rather than "i" for the pronoun ((it's supposed to be capital) and "my" rather than "mi". There are a few other errors as well, but these are the most common.

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