My attempt at translating this https://e-hentai.org/g/654495/619ea7a335/ uploaded a while back. I take no credit for the creation and apologize for any mistakes while translating. I translated it using my rusty Spanish from school, various online dictionaries and translators.

Base +6, yaoiboi +5

I love the first season, never watch the second. People said it good, but after Aang die so did the Anime for me anyway. It good that a doujinshi came out, but man did this one pack everything. Two girls combo, randoms others, this really have everything in one. Thanks @Kaygeebee.
My English is pretty decent so I'll say this was pretty well done. Everything ran pretty smooth.

Base +14, zeebee1 -6, Ensei Sohryu -6, Esplendora -6, drame -6, bigbigman121 -7, Widestance -6, PhraozenFlame -6, jolog -7

I don't get how this comic doesn't receive a better rating. It resembles the characters in art and in personality (till they got in heat). The art style was perfect for the series, though I would've preferred them getting aroused or dazed by the cactus fruit. Just for story ^.^

Base +8