The typesetting is bad and the fact that many bubbles lack punctuation marks makes it even worse, but the flow of the dialogue is really smooth and in the end that's what really matters.

Also, you missed page 32.

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poor grammar

2: "Honoka seems like she's having fun recently" - Verb tense
2: "Her dancing and singing have improved I wonder what happened" - Run-on sentence
4: "Wait Don't change subjects" - Run-on sentence or missing punctuation or whatever
8: "You won't get your kiss like that y'know" - Missing punctuation
10: "Hand on that tickles" - Missing punctuation
10: "We just had a live so I smell" - Missing punctuation
12: "So-some thing is hitting me" - That's a "something"
12: "What is!" - Missing question mark
13: "N-no Let's wait till we graduate" - Run-on sentence or missing punctuation or whatever
13: "Let's wait till we graduate It's all good" - Run-on sentence or missing punctuation or whatever
13: "It's all good All good" - Run-on sentence or missing punctuation or whatever

On an unrelated note, I wish there was a tag for poor editing.

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Getting a translated work is already great
Whether it's good or not, doesn't really matter

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Does she always speak of herself in the 3rd person, or is there a mistranslation? I kinda know that japanese don't use pronouns.

Edit: apparently there's a poor grammar tag. please use it on other works.

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@Izur
Thanks for the miss. No idea how I missed that.

@wavedash
I realize it's a terrible translation. Thanks for the pointers though I'm too lazy to edit it.

@darcmistepilon
Yes she does always refer to herself in the third person.

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@wavedash: Can you point out what's wrong in the sentence "Honoka seems like she's having fun recently". I am not native English speaker though I agree that there are many punctuation mistake but still, I don't know what "run-on sentence" means.

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A very bad grammar that I have never seem._."""

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I'll make a list of everything you did right with this translation:

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@aukxn
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Run-on_sentence

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"Poor Grammar"...Haha, such level of self-consciousness..

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I think I'll stay w/ the raw version.

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"CAPSLOCKSCANS"

I'm starting to get a hang of finding out which doujin would have shitty translation work even when they have at least 4-star rating without having to read the comments yet.

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