Those two boys are making the world a better place.

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Can I safely blame Doujin-Moe for starting and/or perpetuating the trend of editors placing punctuation at the end of a sentence on its own line? I'm not sure if that's entirely accurate.

Base +13

I came. I saw. I fapped. and I came again.

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Very nice!!

Base +6, Bio-Hazard -4, HonorableShogun +5, Romi the Byzantine -7

Good work, but need a torrent

Base +6

Like Wave mentioned, don't place punctuation/question marks/etc. on their own line unless absolutely necessary.
Ellipsis should generally be localized (cleaned and aligned horizontally). Though that's not required if it's the only thing in the bubble.
Example: Things like http://puu.sh/f8ssf/0425c060f4.png shouldn't happen.
Spaces like http://puu.sh/f8szr/c18adb49e3.png are unnecessary.
Might want to try changing font sizes according to bubble instead. This http://puu.sh/f8sZF/1db002eaec.png leaves quite a bit of space, while this http://puu.sh/f8t4V/a9d21adf3f.png is almost touching the bubble. Though the latter could also be fixed be simply re-styling it. You know, warp and/or putting each letter on a separate layer and aligning them manually. That kinda thing.
There are some fonts I'd change (mainly some of those box like ones), but that's more of a preference. And I wouldn't take your head off for that kinda thing. :P
I believe you overleveled a little. I'm spotting tiny amounts of detail wipe. Though, again, not a lethal amount. (Don't really feel like getting into that too much either, sorry.)

That's all off the top of my head right now. Overall, not bad for a first(?) edit.

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Fuck, this is great, thanks

Base +6, Romi the Byzantine -7

RAW: https://e-hentai.org/s/9ae3ced1bf/624874-92
ENG: https://e-hentai.org/g/780616/53473d889c/ (you are here)
ESP: https://e-hentai.org/g/812600/4eefb50864/
BRA: https://e-hentai.org/g/1082621/a4b4ec94ce/

Base +40

That's a nice GT-R.

Base +6

Fucking excellent.

Base +2