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(COMIC1☆3) [Ashita no Kouda (Kouda Tomohiro)] Esuchu! (Zettai Karen Children) [English] [Hao Scanlations]

(COMIC1☆3) [明日の幸田 (幸田朋弘)] えすちゅ!(絶対可憐チルドレン) [英訳]

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Posted:2015-03-16 04:15
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Posted on 16 March 2015, 04:15 by:   Haolen    PM
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Hello everyone i brought this new translation, hope you enjoy it and please read the disclaimer in second page.

If you want DD Links for this visit my blog, it´s mostly in spanish but this kind of release will have his introduction in english
http://haoscanlationsrepo.blogspot.com

I took the raws from here: https://e-hentai.org/g/122997/7c615eea5c/

EDIT: Modified with the corrections from Mysteryoustranger3, thanks dude!
Posted on 14 March 2015, 09:20 by:   yetsun    PM
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Kouda Tomohiro. Now that's an artist's work that I haven't seen translated in a long time.
Posted on 14 March 2015, 09:40 by:   mysteriousstranger3    PM
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I volunteer to proofread for you if you'd like.

Page 6: You wrote Fellation, but it should be spelled Fellatio. I'm not good with translating japanese myself, but based on the context of the whole, I think she's alluding to how she learned how to give him a blowjob. So I think instead of " You carried a magazine that you buy in the convenience store" you could put " It was in one of the porn mags you bought." "You are about to cum just from this" Instead of "For this"

Page 7: I'm assuming she's still talking about his approaching climax, so " There's no helping it, huh. If you want to cum, then cum quickly." Then in the next bubble " Want to shoot it all over my breasts? On my face?" would make more sense. In the middle panel, I think you could make it "Any..." like he's stammering here instead of "hou".

Page 8: " This is also your first time... Lets leave those options for another time" Fully and yet need their missing letters, and " I have to do" would make more sense. And the last line " This should be enough" would work just as well.

Page 9: "I will do it without holding back" could also work

Page 10: I think "You're" would work better than "He's".

Page 11: Mabey a comma after "it" and "everything" would help the flow of her telling him to pour it all in.

Page 12: I think "Somehow" would work better than "Somewhat"

Page 13: all you need to do here is take the "An" and make it an "A".

Hope this helps you man.
Last edited on 14 March 2015, 11:14.
Posted on 16 March 2015, 04:35 by:   Haolen    PM
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@mysteriousstranger3 thanks i already fix it with your corrections :D

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