Thanks to 屏幕脏了 for the scans: https://e-hentai.org/g/818135/50b6527e7a/

P.14: Obviously Nachi and Haguro never watched Nanoha.

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Yasen Mask....... Remind me an awful lot of Tuxedo Mask from the Sailor Moon series....

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In this doujin:

4th wall is destroyed

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Funny! I love a good comic with just plain fun.

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ko ru ri always draws the cutest shipgirls.

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Page 7: "I don't think the writing was very good"

They speak the truth. All blame goes to Tanaka.

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@ TenRyuGa: meh, Gundam has more anti-ship beam than Nanoha, in each Gundam series there would be at least more than 1 moment someone fired anti-ship beam.

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@sangwoocool This is a huge misconception. If the writing was bad, he's not to blame. He did the storyboard, not the script writing itself.

All script writing problems go to these people:
Hiroyuki Yoshino (eps 3, 7, 11)
Jukki Hanada (6 episodes)
Takashi Aoshima (eps 4, 6)

Source: http://www.animenewsnetwork.com/encyclopedia/anime.php?id=15814

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Another cute work from ko ru ri!
Feels like Haguro and Nachi's only role in this is just to give commentary ^_^;

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@Gpop Actually, he is. He didn't directly do the writing, but he's known to have assisted in (read: influenced) the story-writing.

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Pixiv: http://www.pixiv.net/member.php?id=197506
HP: http://koruriya.com/

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