This is my first time translating something like this

I'd love to hear any feedback you might have ^^

I worked really hard on this tho, so please be gentle...

You did a fine job. Did you go for a rewrite from scratch or did you have some sense of the original text?
For the next one, read a little on editing in the forums here. Particularly cropping, converting to B/W images, and leveling the tones.
Cheers!

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I'm a big fan of Rewrite. Even bigger fan of Lucia. I was looking for some pics of her when I found the untranslated source and thought I'd give it a crack ^^

Yeah, I'll definitely do that. I had no idea what I was doing at first. Even now I still don't really know my way around the editing tools...

Thank you for your feedback!

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The source material is called Rewrite

https://e-hentai.org/g/527833/1dc47a8be6/

He is not saying the text was rewritten

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I'm new to this, so I don't really understand

I found the raw doujin and translated all the Japanese to English

I didn't change the text or anything if that's what people are thinking... ;-;

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Yes, if you search for the label "rewrite" you will find works where people change the stories with text that fits, hence rewrite rather than translation. Because this source material is called Rewrite, he asked if you were aiming to rewrite to begin with, thinking that this was a very well done rewrite of the original, rather than a translation of a parody book of "Rewrite"

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It was very nicely done, saddens me that people actually misunderstood that rewrite was the source material. More people should know about it :(

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parody:rewrite
language:rewrite
two different category with same tag name
the more you know

RAW:https://e-hentai.org/g/832646/0b64ccf9aa/

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Hmm, too bad the RAW is a bit subpar... the Chinese translation has a better pic, if you're willing to clean that up.

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I considered using the Chinese translated pages, but I thought people would be happier if I kept it as true to the raw as possible

I also personally don't mind the cream colour of these pages

It's easy on the eyes

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Shizuru is just the best bro you can have.

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