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(Felsala) Broken X - Chapters 3-4 [English]

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Posted:2017-03-21 23:18
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Language:English  
File Size:21.18 MiB
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Posted on 21 March 2017, 23:18 by:   felsala    PM
Uploader Comment
Read from left to right

English is not my first language, so if you see any error in any text please tell me how to write it correctly so I can fix it, thanks.

Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/Felsala
Pixiv: http://www.pixiv.net/member.php?id=15281283

Chapters 1-2
https://e-hentai.org/g/975419/eff30800d9/
Posted on 25 September 2016, 23:24 by:   RabidTanker    PM
Score +56
Your wording isn't that bad, to be honest. In fact, the only gripe that I have is this line on page 4: "I got an bad grade and I need an good grade if I want to pass this class." for repeating the word "grade" twice.

My suggestion is "I got a bad grade and I need an better one if I want to pass this class." But that's just an minor nitpick of mine. And the art looks promising.
Posted on 26 September 2016, 09:56 by:   randdoggity    PM
Score +20
I love how calmly Asher reacts to learning Oliver, the most alpha guy he knows, pays for sex. Totally puts a new perspective on that foursome he had in Chapter 1.
Posted on 10 October 2016, 23:09 by:   GGS    PM
Score +40
The faces are too hilarious to be erotic.
Posted on 18 October 2016, 09:52 by:   NoPityy    PM
Score -100
@RabidTanker
Guess what? Go fuck yourself,you fucking piece of grammar nazi shit.
Posted on 18 October 2016, 14:43 by:   f1r3d0g    PM
Score +7
@NoPityy

wait what? the author even asked for errors and how to correct it in the best way.
Posted on 28 November 2016, 04:12 by:   longn776    PM
Score +5
wtf is going on?
Posted on 27 December 2016, 20:41 by:   Bookrat15    PM
Score +2
Uhm. The expressions are.. pretty weird.
Posted on 21 September 2017, 20:57 by:   RaizelX    PM
Score +7
End? Seems like their should be more, but all in all pretty good
Last edited on 06 December 2022, 00:52.

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