Translated and edited by me.
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Very nice Alice piece. A few things, though:
Pg. 2, Pnl 1: "high" has the wrong connotation; "drunk" would be better
Pg. 2, Pnl 3: "Hey, just what on earth are you looking at?!" and "You don't have to fret over it."
Pg. 7, Pnl 4: Not sure, but I think Sakuya is trying to say, "This is it."
Pg. 12, Pnl 4: "should be the cutest" >>> "is the cutest
Pg. 13, Pnl 1: "JK was the obvious choice" >>> "JK is the obvious choice"

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Thanks you for the correction, I'm still in the middle of learning so mistakes kinda pop up everywhere.

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pg 14, "it has be maid!" should be "it has to be a maid!"
pg 16, "Thanks you for" should be either "Thank you for" or "Thanks for"

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All Alice are beautiful

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