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Needs to be longer and with a better grammatical and syntax structure.

"You look as a goddess" should be "You look like a goddess", because he is expressing Aya's beauty. Don't use "As if you are a goddess" too because he's complimenting her. Use that when you're having your character monologue or while your character is thinking.

"Even don't try" should be "Don't even try". The action here is try and is supported by a negative and an adverb, which makes a refusal: "Don't(negative) even(adverb) try(verb)!"

"Girls have inalienable right be late on their date" should be "Girls have an inalienable right to be late on their date", you're just missing the word that supported the indication that a girl has a right to be late on their date (to).

"Don't talk anything" should be "Don't talk anymore" it just flows more and contextually fitting. Since "Don't talk anything" is kind of off-putting and a weird way to order someone to shut up.

"Oh, forgot about time your date, remember?" should be "Oh, it's about time, don't forget about your date." I don't even know where to start on this one. The former sentence just oozes so many fail, but that's alright.

All in all, I wanted to see more of your take on this, since you have a great fashion sense that compliments the Touhou girls. Don't ever lose hope and keep drawing whatever you want!

Cheers and Good Luck!

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The first of Hater on exh I believe.. I didn't know they had anything but one-offs.

Was Sanae raped??... On suwakos permission.. Oh well, she's still a slut.

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While the dialogue could obviously be improved, damn that art though. Love it.

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Sanae did nothing wrong

I demand to fight the artist

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