When I saw this work by Kannel, I really loved the art. I asked if I could publish what I fantasized about in my own mind. Kannel was kind enough to allow me to publish my edited version.
Visit his art here:
https://kannelart.deviantart.com/
https://www.patreon.com/kannelart

Thanks Kannel!

- Emily

PS: I see it lists "Japanese" as the language. I don't know why, and I don't see where to change that.

Cute stuff this guy is making, too bad their entire gallery is censored to fucking heck and beyond that. And I'm talking about anime-steamshowers-over-90%-of-the-screen sort of censored-to-heck.

Base +6, 1qazqaz +6, aumkub47 -6, laaronadnxl -9, neoshingundam +1, udin-san -6, geezame +6

I went back and compared this to the original work and it was surprising how many changes were made.
You did an impressive job of seamlessly integrating them into the work.
I can't say the story is any better like this but it's clear this was mostly for your own particular preferences and that's fine.

Base +6, neoshingundam +1, 01Anon +5