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>To be Continued...
The End.

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Okay, I'm gonna start calling out grammar mistakes in hentai now, because it's pretty ridiculous.

Page 5: "Oh God, my BREAST are responding to this CREATURE touch! Has it really been that long that I get turned on MY AN DISCUSTING alien."
That one was really bad, and the second sentence is just abysmal. "My" instead of "by", "an" instead of "a", misspelled the word "disgusting", and you ended a question with a period instead of a question mark. How on earth did you not catch any of this while you were spending hours drawing this?

"D2 do you read me!"
QUESTION MARKS, MOTHERFUCKER! DO YOU USE THEM?

You worked very hard on this, and the comic is terrific. But there just seems to be this...pandemic of porn artists making really dumb grammar mistakes. I don't see mistakes like this in any other medium. Is there some kind of running joke where porn artists compete to see who can make the most mistakes and not correct them? I'm not expecting you to be perfect or anything, just to fix the mistakes when you see them!

Anyway, your art is good and you should feel good. Just...pay attention to the red squiggly lines!

EDIT: Also, this comment is only valid if the artist speaks English natively. If English is your second language, then you are automatically forgiven for any mistakes and I can hang my head in shame.

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yeah, I was about to say, you make all the right points but forget that not everyone knows english perfectly, but then you "corrected" yourself... also, if you think about it, had they had the knowledge of english, I highly doubt they would have made such massive and obvious (nay, massively obvious) mistakes to begin with, but for those that don't know what is and isn't a mistake, it's hard to correct them...
just some food for thougt

anyway, hope you enjoy :)

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Page 15 needs to be page 10.

Edit: Thanks for rearranging.

Last edited on 11 October 2017, 07:53.

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Why is this old shit being posted in 2017?

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Page 31 claims "To Be Continued" so I guess my question is: When?

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