Hi this is my first comic even i no its not perfect i would love some feedback thanks

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Nice for the first try. I The dark skin tone is doe excellent, and I like the hairy bush. What you could work on, is the pussy with the dick together. I mean, p. 12, what is that pink thing and why is it pushing to the outside of the pussy? It needs to go in, dude. And on p.11, when she's arching her back backwards, the boobs should follow the gravity.

Base +34

In general I like it. Dialogue needs work.

Base +5