Translated & Typesetted by uploader

Chinese: https://e-hentai.org/g/1097397/75bb71fcab/
Pages: 104 - 123

This is translated from Chinese.
Couldn't find the original Japanese version for further proofreading.
Tell me if you find typo and/or weird sentences.

Tatsuko is best girl.

Base +7, Weissrock +6, Nekohunter33 +6, jfragrettel +8, asdeker +8, Porokichin66 +8

Weird sentences, by page:
1: "panties" fits better than "panty", "to adapt" is better left out since it makes sense in context without it, "So did Tastuko" is a bit odd sounding, something like "It was the same for Tatsuko" sounds more natural
2: There should be a "did" or "have" before "you", "seems" should probably be "looks like", "long hair tall girl" should be "tall girl with long hair"
3: "Come here for school" is a bit of a borderline case, I can imagine hearing it but not saying it. I personally think "come to school here" sounds more natural, but it's a matter of taste, really. "Control" should probably be "behave"
4. Abroad, not aboard; become not join; came not come; "scared" sounds better than "afraid" in context; not really sure what "it's like your style" means, but I think something like "that's just like you" is more natural in English. "At this time tomorrow" sounds awkwardly formal in context, replacing the "at" with "about" sounds more appropriate.
5. watch should be watching, oversea should be overseas. Honestly this whole page doesn't sound right, but I think that's probably the author's or the Japanese->Chinese translator's fault.
6. "I had nothing can do" should be "there was nothing I could do", there should be a "the" before "girls", "they have a plot" should be "they're plotting something", "I was here got fucked by two of them before" should be something like "two of them have already fucked me here"
7. "These days" should probably be "for a while", I'm not sure if Ami's last line should be overly formal, but a normal imperative "come out" or "so come out" sounds more normal than "you shall"
8. "made your dick" fits better than "your dick became", "can't even stand up again" mixes tenses, it should be "won't even be able to stand up again", I think "rusty" should be "roughly", "fellatio" and "oral sex" are also relatively formal, "blowjob" is more natural, and there's no reason to include "an" before "oral sex", "pursuit" should probably be "goal", the last "give" should probably be "cause", and "sight" is probably better off as "glance" or "look"
10. "in" should be removed, "you are" should be "are you", "do" should be "doing"
11. There should probably be "a" before "hymen"
12. Either "wanna get" or "want" instead of "wanna revenge"
14. "after that time" should be "since then", "too" should be "either", I think.
18. warm-up should be "warming up", "be" should be "go", "how" should be "however", "wanna" should probably be "wants to" unless it's slurred in the original
20. "girl" should probably be after be careful, "the bath" should be "a bath"
All in all, it's a bit rough around the edges, but I definitely hope you improve since it seems you have good taste in doujins. You might want to look into getting a proofreader.

Base +6, Dick Richards +6, jfragrettel +8, BXLVT +4, Porokichin66 +8, aych001 +6, _Zap_ +12

I can't say I get the thought process of making an inferior version of an existing H-scene in an excellent VN.

Base +6, jfragrettel +8, kuroishironeko +6, mickl3 +6, deth212 +6, _Zap_ +12

Harem tag without a group tag. *deep sigh*

Base +31, jfragrettel +8, bahki +6, Porokichin66 +8

Thanks testreq for proofreading.
I will re-upload an edited version soon :)

Base +10

And the uploader was never seen from again, The End.

Base +4

gotta enjoy the screams from ten chan getting banged

Base +7