Another tankobon version.

RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/1104841/749d9355ad/

Typing and editing by me, translations are based on: https://e-hentai.org/g/1085711/cf60513ada/ with minor changes.

More Pija to come.

Credits to salar (tankobon provider) and Glittering Translations as the original translator.

I welcome your enthusiasm, but I suggest you slow down and take the time to look at what you are doing. Unless you want to redo everything in a year or two, take the time to learn and do things right because it's bad work. It's better to do 1 good chapter than 10 bad ones. (I'm talking about the editing here)
As I told you the first time, good luck.

Note: If you want a detailed list of everything that's wrong I can send you that by PM.

Last edited on 03 January 2019, 19:29.

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The things that could count as a problems I see so far are some texts that are too big, and add needless words in sentence.

...Any reasons why not to do this translation ? I just don't really get why reworked on this for a better version isn't making sense...

Last edited on 03 January 2019, 20:13.

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The biggest reason is that from a quick check everything that looks wrong in this edit of the Glittering Translations script was better in the original.

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@Mysael I'm always open to any criticism, please kindly do so to send a PM. As you can see that I'm doing everything by myself without anyone to QC my work, so any input or feedbacks are greatly appreciated.

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Plain looking girls with nice tiddies are the best.

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p2
3rd bubble - typo, boy instead of boys
5th bubble - should be "oh well, actually, I won't ever have to worry", or "oh well, actually, it's not like I'll ever have to worry"

And yeah, overall this doesn't look bad, but text poking out of every 2nd bubble is annoying, it has no place in a well-done typeset.

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