Ayup, I'm the commissioner and this is the original version with the original dialogue. The one elgringo linked to above is the edited version and I recommend checking that out, if you find the dialogue and name calling too cringy for your tastes. Big props to the editor for the work he put in! Hopefully he'll update the edited version with the rest of the pages sometime soon.
Huh. That's strange. Any idea why Rov would upload the unedited version to Sofurry? I used that version because the images are higher quality PNGs rather than the JPEGs on FA but didn't even notice...
Btw I personally find the new dialogue even more cringeworthy. Sorry. It's not because of the kink, it's because it sounds so forced and trite. I don't know how they don't burst out laughing when saying it.
Heh, I think ya misunderstood me. The dialogue here, in this version that ya uploaded and that Rov has posted on FA, IB and SoFurry, is the one me and Rov originally agreed to. We wanted it to be kinda over the top "porn talk", rather than realistic and too serious. Mainly so that even people, who don't find cuckolding all that hot, would get a chuckle out of it.
As for the edited version, that is linked above by elgringo, was made by a user over on U18-Chan. I've been in contact with them and told 'em that am good with the edits and gave him permission to post the edited version to other imageboards and such, so that people who do find this original dialogue too cringy, can still enjoy the comic elsewhere.