EDIT: Due to the mass bad rating, I am going to redo and resize the entire gallery from source.
I can't seem to figure out how to remove this.

Looks great, just wondering why the pics are different sizes

Base +2, onenightes +6, unknownshadows +6

Translation is good - there is not much dialogue, so no issues there. The editing can be improved. Not all the text fits the boxes, and the font / typestting is a bit plain.

You forgot one text box on p. 19: in the bottom right we still have the chinese.

I guess you used this as raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/997658/37f28bb04b/

Base +38, tj911 -5

A couple lines are stiff sounding to english ears, but overall I found it enjoyable, for your first translation, it's promising. And the typesetting has been mentioned already. It's a shame better raws aren't available.

Base +10

Wood0830
These were ripped directly from the previous gallery. All of which were different sizes and the scans were rather bad in general (Off the page was screencap'd alot and I had to edit the borders to size.)

DJNoni
I just noticed page 19 now, That part I had trouble figuring out exactly what it said. It looks as though its sounding out a pleasure cry of some sort. I translated it to the last character saying "End" but the first character I couldn't make out correctly at all. I was tired the night before editing all of these so I think I forgot to edit that one due to not knowing the exact translation. If someone can help do that for me and comment here what it says that would be great and I wasn't sure what kind of font to use so I'd like to ask everyone here what font is recommended for english translations.

Please let me know.

The most difficult part I had doing this was the raws were all different sizes and resizing might ruin the quality of each page differently and even worse than the current Chinese gallery.
If I did this, I would of had room for the text to fit in each box without losing scan quality from the resize. It's harder than I thought to fit longer english characters in from Chinese.
Also, I was seeing a mix of Japanese aswell when I was translating which only helped a little or maybe that is just me? I have only started to learn to read simplified Chinese

I can always color it afterward, but I want more feedback as to what I should in order to improve the pages.

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Maybe I can help you,I will give you the original pictures，and I can help you to understand the p19.I hope we can have more teamwork.Maybe we can talk more in some International chatting software like wechat.

Base +7, kalulu520 +2