I love "Conchita Takes Charge", a TG text story from Dan Collins, and I've wanted to realize my readaptation for a long time: finally, here it is! I've made some considerable changes from the original story: that's why I've changed the story and the characters names.
It's made of 34 pages, where I've experimented a new kind of narration: rather than the usual dialogues, I've preferred to polish just a few renders, adding a caption to each of them, that describes that scene from the main character's POV: I'd like the reader to complete the story in his/her mind, understanding the limitations of one's perception of the world.
I know this website is not meant for this kind of comics, and I'm sorry if this doesn't meet your tastes: I continue to publish on ehentai, because it's here that I've found the first TG comics (from CBlack), and they're probably the reason I've been doing this, for over a year now. I also need a place where to put the uncensored version!
Feel free to drop a comment, good or bad: I respect and value your feedback!

If you liked this comic, you'll probably like what's on my DeviantArt profile, the first place where I post my stories, and where we discuss them page by page day by day!
My DeviantArt profile: https://www.deviantart.com/leniotg

Thanks for your time, it's an honor: have a nice day! :D

EDIT: I've changed my username to LenioTG, and this is my Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/LenioTG
Thank you for stepping by!! :D

honestly the writing is not very good for all kinds of reasons... its not the comic type, it just doesnt read very well

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@banjomarx What do you mean? Are you reading it from a smartphone, and so the font size is too little, or do you think I'm a bad writer? Please be more specific! ^^

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Noice, Looking forward for more works!!!

Thanks @FasterFaster

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@KamikazeShooter You're very welcome, thanks for existing! :D
The first place where you'll find my future content is always my DeviantArt profile: https://www.deviantart.com/tgfan4

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I gotta agree with Banjomarx; I don't think the writing is very good.

But it's cute and kinda fun, at least.

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Hi @TheGoatIsWatching, thanks for your feedback! Could you be more specific, please? What would you have done to make it better? :)

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the english feels kind of awkward, and parts of it just feel really weird, like that the guy thought the more revealing outfit was because she wanted to be more comfortable? that just feels weird. Also we really should have some form of dialogue or something for when hes supposedly trying not to cheat on her, i mean we go in one frame, from totally non sexual relationship to full blown sex. Not to mention the whole thing about making a wish and the guy being totally ok with that, also the wearing womens clothing thing feels a bit forced, i mean i understand where ur going and that ur trying to hit certain fetishes, but the guy seems totally ok with it with only a brief mention of the opposite. I mean the characters feel more than a bit 2D and not in a good way imho, and so much is just glossed over, and with far too little explanation.

Basically, any fetish that ur trying to hit is only shown so briefly and vaguely that i dont think that anyone would have time to "enjoy" this work if it hit their fetishes and the english feels robotic at times and void of emotion. We are so far removed from the characters that even if the english was great its more like a summary than a story

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@banjomarx Thanks for your feedback, I value it! :)
English is not my first language, but I think that's not the problem here: you've not liked this kind of narration! I've actually written some long text stories, full of explanations, dialogues, emotive background etc., and I've realized long standard comics, but here I wanted to realize a few quality pages: every little glimpse should have become a story in the reader's mind! The little space for words forced me to summarize, and that was a choice.
I prefer to experiment and to fail, rather than sit comfortably all day around! ^^

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A wonderful way to retelling a famous story from fm. I really like your changes here. I think it might become easier to read if you make it a full comic(like a comic book, with dialogue box). Or make it full text pages and put the visuals here and there throughout the story. But I really like your idea here, and would like to see more of them in the future! ;)

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@Moonlights31 Thank you very very much!!! :D
Since this story is not a 100% original for me, I've spent just 10 days realizing it, but if you like my style in general, I'm always posting something on my DeviantArt profile! Right now, I'm continuing "Life Warp Opportunity"! :D
It's made of dialogues.
Then, I'm also doing "Role Swap Suprise", that is a text stories with images here and there!

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