This is my first translation

RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/1437971/5c7a6c1478/

I just realized I messed up some grammar for plural and singular.
Will fix it later...

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Don't mean to shit on you since it's your first translation and all, but it's kinda broken english. However you can get the gist of it so it's not half bad i guess.
Keep on improving or something?

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You also missed a page between 26 and 27. There should be one more.

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...so does this count as Oppai Loli, or...?

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it's great but they hit it real hard with the pixel censors!

Base +8, Dothion +5, Novanity +6, Icgw +4, Darker7 +4, bob1909bob +6, BooPooDoop +5

Finally one where they get come uppance.

Base +6, Clone26 +6, bob1909bob +6

Does the way the breasts are drawn look kinda weird in this to anyone else? Can’t quite put my finger on it.

Base +6, Sitek -6, DarkShadow6 +6, bob1909bob +6, Uneliasmarsu +6

Holy shit, this is really hard to read. There's a lot of redundancy and grammatical inconsistencies. You should probably get someone to proofread this.

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Yeah, the English in this is quite... troubled.
It's still readable and somewhat fappable, but the grammar issues make my brain hurt.
Still, I've seen worse from the likes of Estaog/Laruffi, and he made quite a few translations and didn't improve at all.
I still like the attempt, and I'd LOVE to see a cleaned-up version with better grammar.
Good first try!
Thanks for this!

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YAY IT DOESN'T INVOLVE DICKSLUTIFICATION!

Base +6, JinOni +7, bob1909bob +6

I can read and understand japanese basic level but english is not my first language. if there's anyone who want to proofread, mention me on twitter @sillyghe thanks.

Base +6, bob1909bob +6

English also isn't my first language but I can't understand Japanese so I am grateful for translation. For all of those that think that you did bad job what they don't do it better and then complain.

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Oppai loli
Type: Attribute / Visual
Description: Little girl with anything larger than small breasts.
------------------------------------------------------------> Note: Requires the lolicon tag. <---------------------------------------------------------------------

Someone please fix this one...

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@W8W Nah, the criticism here is valid. Bear in mind none of the criticism seema ungrateful for the translation, it's simply a matter of seeing possible improvements that could be made to the translation itself, particularly by fixing the frequent grammar mistakes. Proofreaders can be especially helpful in cases like this, so look out for anyone willing to help.

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The following are over 10 grammatical mistakes to warrant the poor grammar tag.

# Page | Example | Why it is poor grammar
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01 P02 | So Standard advertisement for an App | missing comma after the "so"
02 P03 | Point the camera to target | should be "at the" target or something similar
03 P03 | What's this TSF things? | "Things" should be "Thing"
04 P04 | And then, put together to the frame, next is | mostly a non-nonsensical sentence
05 P04 | I'm enough of this stupid things you do! | should be: "I've had enough of the"...
06 P08 | Are you really turn into a girl? | should be: "Have you really turned"...
07 P08 | It seems you voice also becoming like a girl | Missing "is" after "voice"
08 P08 | Is this what you mean funny!? | Missing "by" after "mean"
09 P11 | Ooh! Amazing you become so cute! | "become" should be "became"
10 P11 | At first I only try this for killing time. | "try" should be "tried"
11 P12 | I can't let you with short hair like that. | "with" should be "have"
12 P12 | Long hair is better for girl after all! | Missing "a" after the "for"

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