Holy crap! That grammar is atrocious.

Base +6, endergod1 +5, greendragon24 -6, Beddhist +15, mikini +6, sable1 +23, Isseiakairyu +6

Before: Huh, the art looks okay and DXD could use more works, what's with the rating?

After: Sigh. Lots of text in a word bubble is a bad idea, this is a comic and not a book. Then there's the punctuation marks, the misspelled words, and the words used incorrectly.

For examples of poor grammar:

Page 5, top panel:

Rias why exactly, did you and Asia have to walk back home with me?

Because Asia need somewhere to stay, and this seems like the perfect place

third panel:

Welcome home honey, I had no idea you knew Reus.

Eah we summoned her to make things more interesting in the bedroom if you know what I mean.

Eww, gross stop it and I don't want to even think about it.

Oh, come on now Issei you musn't let yourself be constraint

Page 7 bottom panel:

Oh, dear I'm terribly sorry I forgot to tell you only the members of the Occult Research Club members and the contractors are aware of the contracts being fulfilled which leaves, us to do as we please I do hope we didn't keep you up late last night your parents are always like that.

Weight always like that?

Base +8, endergod1 +5, greendragon24 -6, Beddhist +15, mikini +6, liberius +6, shenyuanelang +9, Void161 +3, Drcl97 -6

i need more!!

Base +6, greendragon24 -6, mikini -6, shenyuanelang +9, Void161 -3, Drcl97 -6, allenwalker39 +6, Lord Dashwood -8

This is like those shitty fics on ff except it's a comic here.

Base +6, doc reaper 666 -7, Smuthunter +6, SakaiYuuji97 +8, Hue_Hue +6, liberius +6, stupid army +7, Void161 +3, Drcl97 +6, sable1 +23, Isseiakairyu -6, DoctorGlirch +2

just to point out this whole thing is currently up on the writers patreon for $5 if anyone wants to go grab it lols alongside the whole of the second comic in this series, he commisions pal to make them for him then sells them as early access for his patreon, the guy is called overlordmaou

Base +6, Drcl97 -6, allenwalker39 +6

I was kind of dissapointed by that ending. I was hoping for more stuff, like, for example, Issei being pegged or penetrated by a futa (the cover does imply at least femdom). This comic had very little to do with the cover and wasn't all that good.

Base +8, Isseiakairyu -6

pt 2. https://e-hentai.org/g/1545286/b73a97d7a3/

Base +8