Crowview gives me a raging heart boner |_)_)||||||<3||||||D

DISCLAIMER: I do not know French! If you see any mistakes, please let me know so I can correct it. Hopefully the way I went about giving the translation for the French isn't too distracting?

Raw: https://e-hentai.org/g/1471255/383f1384c1/

Fonts: Anime Ace, Mouth Breather, Victor Handwriting, MS Mincho

Edit: Redone editing on P4 and P7.
Edit2: Further cleanup.

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That editing leaves a lot to be desired. :/

Also, Mouth Breather is still a horror font. <.<

Edit:
Stuff like https://i.imgur.com/Zqf7HZn.png or yes https://i.imgur.com/tcc4hBC.png needs to be properly redrawn. No doubt about that.
If you need how-to's either start googling for guides or try joining a group that teaches redrawing. It will also help you familiarize yourself with PS tools in general.

And Mouth Breather being any sort of standard for moans is really just a myth among newbies. I'm guessing it's a remnant from when H-scanlation only just started becoming a thing or something.

In any case, I can't really help you with that directly, simply because I would almost never use the exact same fonts between different projects but you can use AB's old font guide as basic reference material https://translatoranon.tumblr.com/post/61672435219/a-collection-of-font-guides-ive-made-over-the
While I wouldn't 100% agree with it the picturesque nature of it is nice. For moans, you'll generally want to look for handwritten fonts.

Last edited on 21 September 2019, 15:33.

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Let me know if there's a better alternative font for 'screams of pleasure', because I agree, it can be too harsh but I haven't found anything to replace it yet. It just seems like the standard for translators, despite not always being the best choice.
Which part could do with better editing? If you're referring to P7, then yes I agree, it could be better. I'll see if I can make it look a little prettier in the future.

Edit: Alright, I think that looks a lot better. I didn't touch the fonts, I just didn't feel that needed to be changed at the moment, but I will definitely find something different for my next translations.

Last edited on 21 September 2019, 17:08.

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Crowview is a pregnancy god.

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you want to fap to doujinshi with pregnant french girl while learning french ?
just read this doujinshi and 𝒇𝒂𝒊𝒓𝒆 𝒅'𝒖𝒏𝒆 𝒑𝒊𝒆𝒓𝒓𝒆 𝒅𝒆𝒖𝒙 𝒄𝒐𝒖𝒑𝒔

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Just so we're clear, the two screenshots were examples, not ALL of it.
There are also broken bubbles like https://i.imgur.com/3gH5i4S.png all over it. And whatever this https://i.imgur.com/XSb7iL0.png is?
And that's still probably not even all of it because I'm literally just glancing at the thumbnails.

>I didn't touch the fonts, I just didn't feel that needed to be changed at the moment
Yeah... I'm just gonna say: People unironically using mouthbreather as a moan font fills me with a pretty profound feeling of 'No' but whatever.

Edit:
Well, it's part of basic cleaning. But if you think pointing out issues with the basics is nit-picky then, uh, there isn't really anything else I can say.
But eh, you do you, pal.

Last edited on 21 September 2019, 19:56.

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Vanilla Pregnant, but also with negligee

Please yes, your efforts are greatly appreciated

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Criticizing a broken speech bubble seems really nit-picky to me... Generally I leave those alone because it takes more time than it's worth. At this point it just seems to be a matter of opinion whether a few scuffs really matter at all to the reading and enjoyment experience of a doujin.

Edit: Nevertheless, broken speech bubbles are now fixed.

Last edited on 21 September 2019, 20:08.

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@defski
You can try "SF Grunge Sans" for moans. I use it quite often for moans. You con download it for free at dafont.com. And they have tons of other free fonts, so chances are good to find something you like there.
Or you can use "yikes" the free clone of cczoinks. Doujins.com uses one of these two.

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I think you did a good job on the cleaning with your fixes.

Not redrawing partially cut lines (ex: speech bubbles) isn't the end of the world, but doing it adds a sense of professionalism. I think redrawing is a skill worth acquiring if you keep translating/editing, especially if you end up doing works that have a lot of speech outside of text bubbles. The clone and patch healing tools can come in pretty handy for that.

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@Ancient-Alien
Thanks, SF Grunge Sans looks really good in uppercase.
@notrealz
I won't deny, making things look professional has a somewhat satisfying feeling!

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你好騷啊(｡･∀･)ﾉﾞ

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lmaoed at the courier font french

then lmaoed harder when i realized it's in the original

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Yes, yes, yes! Thank you very much for translation!

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Everytime we get these kinds of doujins I keep expecting and being disappointed by the lack of epilogue. I think the Atago doujin where it has the post-story epilogue with Atago and Admirals daughters day-to-day life just spoiled me to desire that kind of ending.

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Sorry, I don't mean to jump on the critic-train, but the first two words are typos of 'Admiral' lol. Hard not to notice. It's great to see you work so hard on this, though. Putting effort and hard work into things is always respectable, no matter the result. Your next project will be easier and turn out better, I'm sure of it!
Edit: Wait, I just saw it a third time. It's french. My bad lol I'm the idiot

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the japanese lesson at the end kill me XDDD

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i need moar doujinshi like this one

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As a French myself, it is very disturbing to fap to someone called Richelieu > https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Armand_Jean_du_Plessis_de_Richelieu

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