When James finds himself in need of money to be able to go to the big dance tonight with no money of his own. Remembering that his sister has been hiding a stash in her closet, along with her ridiculous Goth outfits, wigs, and boots. But discovering her money may also lead to more then he was looking for...

that's a big feelsbadman

Base +7, Serena Lea +5, jlarsoone +5

This seems like a knockoff of an image set from Sticky-Site (RIP) with the same premise, just with much better (and color) art. Not just the story and premise, but the character design, wig, and outfit. This set seem like a more verbose, and worse, version of a story I already read.

RE@OP: Good attempt. Thanks for bringing back some good memories. When Sticky-Site was abruptly taken down without a chance to archive it a lot of great stories were lost. Thanks for taking the effort to bring an old classic to new audiences.

Last edited on 12 December 2019, 07:00.

Base +6, timonator14 +7, DeltaX +9, jediotosleinad -6, Lordviral -6

Art is 5/10. Outside of practicing to improve, there's nothing to really add per se. Once I saw it's quality and give it a chance, I just turned my brain to focus on the story and the sequence at that point. I've seen MUCH worse, but this isn't good either. It's tolerable, and with a decent story and writing it's very manageable.

Story/writing can use a bit of work. The idea gets across which is great, but during the entire "transformation" sequence it felt like was just "WTF, get the fuck off" over and over. Obviously not quoted, but it gave the vibe. There's also the point of the breast forms. Yes, they had a "reason" of being there with the "backstory" of them, but WHY were they existent in the first place? Not to mention whatever parent going "wtf" kinda kills it a bit as well. It detracts from an adult demeanor. Yes it's an acronym and maybe used to save space, but it doesn't sit well.

Also on the note of out of place story bits, a father being mad about saving money? It feels like an excuse to try and have him take more than he needs just to further the story. Filler, if you will. It has no sense of being there, it would make more sense if he were to just have the idea of taking the money. If it's about repercussions, then one should be instated for him going into her room and trashing the hell out of it. He should be concerned about that, and yet he isn't.

TL;DR- Story is okay, writing is meh, art is really meh. Practice, practice.

Base +6, escaper +6, Serena Lea +5, jediotosleinad -6

Yes the story was written by StickySteph who I do believe released the written story on sticky site. This was an older comic a drew sever years ago. I just wanted to share it. I’m still working on getting better at drawing. I have several other comics I have drawn since this one. Each one is getting better.

Last edited on 10 December 2019, 13:41.

Base +6, kirakabuki +6, Moonlights31 +6, Transgressor +6, AnnabelleSpheres +5, Kotovsky +6, jediotosleinad +6, just Zombie +5, Lordviral +6

Right on man, keep at it. Looking forward to seeing your work in upcoming years.

Base +6, jediotosleinad +6, Lordviral +6