Heyo, this is my first ever attempt at translating something. Since university has turned into me being stuck in a neetcage thanks to Corona-chan, I found a lot more time on my hands, so I figured I'd try my hand at this. I'm still a retard with Japanese, so if you notice anything wrong, or if you have any other feedback, please let me know!

Sorry for the scan quality, it's the only version that was uploaded. Hone's Riamu is worth it though.

RAW: https://e-hentai.org/g/1495823/9f54a97309/

HEAD EMPTY
NO THOUGHTS

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This girl has such a nice figure! I love those boobs... especially in doggy style, on p. 22. thanks for translating this, even if it's a first attempt.

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tfw no smol 4ft10in big tiddie dumb retard depressed gf i can convince to have sex by saying it's a special lesson

why even LIVE

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As you wished, here is some feedback for you.
The RAW quality is bad, no arguing about that, but why is every page you edited in e-hentai's 1280px res, while the untouched are in full res?
You dont't have to upload the 1280s e-hentai displays for default. You just have to upload your original sized images, e-hentai creates all other resolutions that might be displayed depending on the users settings.

The fontsize is a bit to big. Leave your text some room to breath. Probably 4pt down would have also done the job.

The font you used for the moans like on page 17 doesnt really fit. For me it looks more like a font suitable for horror stories. One of the fonts I like to use for moans is SF Grunge sans, you can download them for free at dafont.com or you find some other fonts you like there.

And finally, I personaly just hate Manga Temple. Nearly every time this font gives me the creeps.

Otherwise not to bad for a first time typesetting.

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@Ancient-Alien Hey thanks a ton, that's a lot of useful info.

I wasn't entirely sure about the upload process and the image resizing, that's why I just grabbed the gallery resizes and worked with those. I'll keep what you've said in mind in the future.

On both the fontsize and the choice of font itself: I had found some "Idiot's Guide to Editing Manga" or something, and it had a collection of fonts and suggestions that I attempted to follow. But not actually knowing any typesetters personally nor where to find any to talk to, I kind of winged it with what info I'd found. I'll also be taking your font size and font choice suggestions to heart. Thanks again, like I said, this is the first time I've ever even opened an image editor, let alone aligned text in bubbles and boxes.

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Ah, so "history repeats itself" (Minami-san and Miyu-san) where now Riamu-san now undergoes *koff-koff* P-san's "Special Training".

Conclusion in this instance: "IT'S GOOD TO BE THE PRODUCER (lucky bastard ... GRR)!"

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Is masturbating after you wake up really that bad for your productivity?

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