Some translation comments. On the last page with Fuyuko, the Producer says “It does looks like Fuyuko’s the one who’s manipulating me around.” When I first read this translation, that line confused me and I had no idea why the Producer was dropping that line randomly. It didn’t really make sense to me! I didn’t know enough Japanese to check the original back then to see what it was supposed to be. Checking now, his original line was “俺が冬優子に振り回されている姿に似てるな”. What he’s actually doing is responding to Fuyuko’s line about the two black kites looking like Fuyu and Producer: “Ah, those two certainly do look similar to when I’m being yanked around by Fuyuko.” Basically, he saw a chance to get a bit of payback for all of her antics throughout the book and took it!
There are a few other issues. On page 20, “絶対膣内に射精させてやるんだから” should probably use the ‘make’ meaning of させる instead of ‘let’ since, well, she’s forcing him to cum inside her regardless of his protests. On page 14, it’s pretty confusing that Fuyuko’s asking if the Producer wants to fill her belly with ‘this’ when he came on her, not inside her. What she’s getting at is more like, “Jeez, it’s almost dinner. Are you trying to gorge me on this instead of food?” There are also a number of grammatical errors, like “Don’t you think the kanji look a little same?” on the first page of text. It should be something like, “Don’t you think the kanji look almost the same?” or “Don’t you think the kanji look really similar?”
It’s still an okay translation, and it certainly doesn’t rise to the level of the rough translation tag. However, I’ve also seen you produce much more solid translations. Given that it was posted in April 2020, I wonder if the lower-than-usual quality’s because of where we were in the pandemic? April 2020 was a pretty rough time. I really appreciated seeing this when it was posted back then. Thank you.